Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The issue that whether parents should offer their school-age children money for each high grade they get in school is a hot debated one. One one hand, some people claim that the money can work as incentive for children to study. On the other hand, some may argue that children are not mature enough to handle money. For me, I believe that it is a good idea to encourage children to study, for the following reasons.
First of all, offer school-age children money for each high grade they get in school can motivate them to keep studying hard. Since rewarding is a good way to help human habituate new habit, it can make children establish positive study habit. For example, I remember when I was elementary school children. Every time I got a good grade, my parents would offer me a little amount of money to buy things I want to buy. Because my parents did not really let me buy snacks, so every time I received the money, I would use my price to buy chocolate. And the desire of eating chocolate motivated me to get high grade again.
Moreover, it can also help children establish correct idea of resource management. Since children do not have many chance to manage their money by themselves, it is a good way for them to learn how to spend money properly. Let's take my own experience as example again. When I turned into the teenage boy, chocolate was no longer an attractive incentive for me to study. So, what my parents did was raise a little bit of my price, and told me I could save the money that I got, in that way I could buy things that were attractive to me, such as sneakers or clothes. With the help of these experiences, I have developed saving habit, which is still very helpful for me today.
However, some people may argue that letting children manage their own money can be harmful for them, since they can use those money to buy things like video games that would distract them. It is true that offering money to children would have this risk, yet children have to be independent one day, they will eventually need to learn how to manage their own money. Then why do not we let them start learning earlier, right?
In conclusion, despite the concerns that some people have are reasonable, if children really get distracted by things that they bought, they will eventually receive the penalty that they deserve, which is losing reward.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: this money; those moneys; those monies
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...pite the concerns that some people have are reasonable, if children really get dist...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, still, then, for example, in conclusion, such as, first of all, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 13.8261648746 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1944.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 425.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57411764706 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.33927324354 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482352941176 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 609.3 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4028824536 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.3 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360616738478 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12108461092 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107782427914 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213881507394 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0989972291927 0.0645574589148 153% => OK
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.