Do you agree or disagree with the following statement In order to become financially responsible adults children should learn to manage their own money at a young age Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays, teenagers and young adults are getting more and more irresponsible with their money, which leads to them to be unable to have enough amount of money for emergency. Therefore, I agree with the statement that in order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age, for the following reasons.

First of all, letting children to manage their own money can help them realize the importance of money. Since if all the expenses are paid directly from the parents, it is unlikely for children to notice that money is limited. For example, I still remember when I was eight years old, I did not know that money was such an important thing. So every time I went to the toys store, I would alway ask my parents to buy toys for me. Of course my parents would always decline my request, and I would get super angry. I did not know the reason until I turned twelve years old, the year that my parents let me manage my breakfast money, then I realized that to manage the money well was quite challenging. As a result, I stopped asking my parents to buy toys or video games for me.

Moreover, managing money at a young age can help children be independent. Because knowing that money is a limited resource could help them stop asking for help from their parents. For instance, after I started managing my own breakfast money, I began to consider how could I manage my money so I was able to have satisfying breakfast everyday. Ever since I have developed this sense of thinking, I became less dependent to my parents. Since I was capable to build my meal plan myself, which still helps me a lot today.

However, some people may argue that letting children manage their money too early could make them become targets to bad people, since they are easy to deceived. Yet in my points of view, parents can let children manage little amount of money first, just like I started from managing my breakfast money. This way parents can control the risk that children lose their money by being scammed.

In conclusion, being financially responsible is imperative for adults. If parents control the amount of money that they manage, letting children manage their own money can be a good way to achieve it.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 324, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...y money so I was able to have satisfying breakfast everyday. Ever since I have de...
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Line 5, column 336, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... was able to have satisfying breakfast everyday. Ever since I have developed this sense...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, of course, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1862.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6783919598 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41355167462 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48743718593 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 577.8 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4645752051 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9473684211 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73684210526 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256112311034 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100002860633 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124416656472 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190518927034 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11836975465 0.0645574589148 183% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, of course, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments