Some parents offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school. Do you think this is a good idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, some parents motivate their children to study hard with some kind of award, such as a financial award. Some people assert it is a good idea, whereas others opposite this point of view. In my opinion, a financial award is an effective way to lash children to study hard and get a good grade, especially with the following reasons are taken into consideration.
To begin with, it is a feasible way for parents to motivate their children to pay attention to study. Children need to be encouraged when they succeed or make a a huge progress, and money can be the role of encouragement. For example, when I was a puple in elementary school, my parents told me that if I got a high rank in the monthly test or the final exam, I can be awarded 20 yuan for it. I was so excited about it because I thought it was a large amout of money and I can obtain it simply through an exam! Thus, before every test or exam, I worked hard until night, obliterately preparing for the incoming test. I looked through every question and checked every answer carefully before handing the paper in. In this way, I earned a lot of money, and in the same time, I got a higher grade. As a result, I believe that this way is effective and helpful.
Moreover, it can cultivate a good habit of saving and planing money for children. By behaving well in exams, children can get a certain amount of money and this is a perfect time for children to learn how to arrange their deposit. According to the Times magazine, the people who start to monitoring their money in the early stage of their life are more likely to succeed in the future.
Admittedly, some may point that it is bad for children to bond money with grades, and children could lie about their grades to earn more money. However, I do not think that the cheating behavior is the result of a wrong award, but instead, it is the absence of education on honesty. Parents should teach their children how to be honest.
In conclusion, offering children with money as the reward of a good grade is an effective way to motivate them for parents, in my opinion.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, thus, well, whereas, for example, in conclusion, kind of, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1721.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4585492228 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50052076511 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.50518134715 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 555.3 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6845407478 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.235294118 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7058823529 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.88235294118 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313160972852 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10105037237 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0448767886644 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177176865056 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0183950681247 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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