Some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is your opinion?
The Earth and its enviroment is very important for humankind. Because it is the place where they live and if it is destroyed, their life is destroyed too. Some people think that human activities are destroying the Earth and they should be stopped, while others disagree with this. I agree with the first opinion beacause of a few reasons that are explained in the following.
The first reason is that man are doing activites for business and money without caring about the consequences of their activities, and this is destroying the Earth's nature. Every year that passes on, we see forest are destroyed for maintaing wood industry and it seems they are not planning to reduce their activites. For example there was a huge, dense forest near my home city, Kermanshah almost 10 years ago that we went for our leisure time and it was amazing. But when a paper factory was constructed there, they started cutting down trees and every year they increased the rate of clearing the forest, and now it is almost destroyed and noithing remains from that great forest. Another example of destructioon of nature is rivers, which are polutted by the trash that are released in them. For instance there is river flowing in the middle of my city, that was once so clean that my kinds of creatures and fishes lived in. The birds came to its shores and it was so beautiful. I went there with my friends for fishing which created one of my most enjoyable experiences in my life that I cannot forget. But now it is totally polutted by factories' rubbish and there is no living creature there.
The second reason that I have for my opinion is global warming. Every year scientists alarm about this but it seem that no one cares about it. I once read in a article the the average temprature of the earth is increasing every year and it has increased a few degrees, I don't remember the exact value, in the last five years and if this continus in this way, the huge ice mountains in poles will start to melt, and this could lead to an increase in sea level which can destroy many coastal cities. I also read in another article that weather of many places is changing due to global warming, and this is something that I have noticed about my city in the last few years. I remeber when I was a child, there was a huge amount of snowing in winters, which created the opportunity for us to go outside and play, but now we have almost no snow in winters and I regret about kids that cannot have the pleasure that we had.
So because of the reasond above, and many other reasons that I cannot explain them in this short essay, I think human's greed for improving business and havinf more money is destroying the Earth, and therefore destroying mankind itself. I think those who are responsbile for it should act as soon as possible and make a desicion before it's too late.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 79.0 43.0788530466 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2339.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 516.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53294573643 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76609204519 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35961769262 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498062015504 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 730.8 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.1385500266 48.9658058833 149% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.95 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.3 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.111867871952 0.236089414692 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0406842789862 0.076458572812 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0661244768009 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103528723009 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.094695025955 0.0645574589148 147% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.29 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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