Some people believe that parents should pay their children a small amount of money to do jobs around the home (such as washing the dishes or taking out the garbage), while other people believe that parents should not pay their children to do these tasks. Which view do you agree with, and why?
It is generally accepted that children need to be supported by their parents. In fact, parents are able to instruct many thing to children such as accumulate money. Some people believe that a small amount of money is given to children by their parents because doing some job related to the home like washing the dishes; nevertheless, other people do not think so. However, it is challenging for us to prefer one to another because both of them have their advantages and disadvantages. As a matter of fact, there are numerous reasons why people should devote some money to their children owing to do some activities about home, and I explore only primary one here.
In the beginning, the first aspect to point out is that allocating a little money to children by parents due to what they do in their home; provide an appropriate ground to save a small amount of money. Given this issue, when parent give some monry to children, they will capable of learning some critical matter about saving money that is significant useful for each children. For example, I remember when I was young, I had abig dream about having a beutiful byscale that was a little expensive. So, my mother, who know about my demand, give me a great choice that if I help her to do a part of her activities about home, she will give me some money for each day. In addition, she learn how can I manage my money. By this way, I could purchess the bycicle after 10 days due to the fact that the price of bicycle was 100 yuan and my mother gives me 10 yuan for each day. Hence, not only the bucycle is biught but also I help to my mother.
Second, the most persuasive point is that offering some money to children due to helping their parent for doing home's activity teach to them that be discipline and be responsible. Particulary, doing some tasks such as cleaning their environments are teached to children. To illusturate this point one needs only refer to a sitution that the children did not have cleaned their own room. Although they must clean their rooms every day, sometimes they are too exusted for doing it. Thus, parent can give some money to the children as a reward since they learnt to do their acts in time. After long time, the ability of responsibility be enhaced among children and they will do it quickly due to the fact that cleaned rooms make them feel lively and happy.
From what has been discused above, we may safely draw the conclusion that parents can support their children by dedecating some money to them becuse of their help; therefore, although we can regard many merit for this issue, the ability of saving money and be responsibility are two considerable factors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun thing seems to be countable; consider using: 'many things'.
Suggestion: many things
.... In fact, parents are able to instruct many thing to children such as accumulate money. S...
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... was a little expensive. So, my mother, who know about my demand, give me a grea...
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'learns'.
Suggestion: learns
...me money for each day. In addition, she learn how can I manage my money. By this way,...
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...ulary, doing some tasks such as cleaning their environments are teached to childr...
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...e children as a reward since they learnt to do their acts in time. After long tim...
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... rooms make them feel lively and happy. From what has been discused above, we ma...
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Message: Possible agreement error. The noun merit seems to be countable; consider using: 'many merits'.
Suggestion: many merits
...help; therefore, although we can regard many merit for this issue, the ability of saving m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, therefore, thus, for example, in addition, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2194.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 477.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59958071279 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45119191289 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48427672956 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.7593511963 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.473684211 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1052631579 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84210526316 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376583431399 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.134967608157 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120268015957 0.0737576698707 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.250688286189 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133877311544 0.0645574589148 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.7 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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