Some people believe that parents should pay their children a small amount of money to do jobs around the home (such as washing the dishes or taking out the garbage), while other people believe that parents should not pay their children to do these tasks. Which view do you agree with, and why?
Throughout history, children have played a prominent role in all societies. Because it is a paramount importance, the researchers have always searched some ways for enhancing children nurture. A controversial question which is often raised this idea is whether caregivers ought to give some money to their juveniles for doing some duties at dweller or nor. I personally contend that parents must not give some money to their children when they do some works at home; therefore, I disagree with this proposal. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
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The first paramount factor to be mentioned is that kids must learn how cooperation at home. To elaborate on my point, children must do some homework without giving any money as a gift. In this situation, they learn that doing some jobs such as washing dishes, taking out some rubbish, and many other duties are their duty so that they have responsibility at their home as the same as other members. Therefore, the juveniles learn that they have to help their mother and father at home. As we know, a family group as the same as a community in the small size. In the society, each person has a specific duty for doing that help to improve their society. As a result, each person at home has a special duty to do.
Another reason which deserves some worlds here is that children must become a responsible person. To shed more light on this matter, since parents pay some money to their children, they say to their children that they do not have responsible at home. In other words, when parents take care of their children, nobody pays some money to the parents for this. In this situation, parents have a duty for this job. As a result, kids also have responsibility at home such as cleaning home and washing clothes. In contrast, if guardians pay some money to the children, they may send a message to children that they do not have a duty in their home. Also, if children take some money from their parents, they would face some problems in future. When they will entire to the society, they think that they must receive money for each duty they do.
To wrap it up, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that fathers and mothers do not give some money to their children when they help to do a home activity. I believe that if caregivers do not pay some money to their children, not only their children learn how to cooperation but also they become a responsible person.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, so, therefore, well, in contrast, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2066.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72768878719 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5388538481 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421052631579 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.9 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.8375131385 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.9090909091 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8636363636 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.40909090909 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.362050889342 0.236089414692 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135693190919 0.076458572812 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101313711586 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.270015552214 0.150856017488 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056604575189 0.0645574589148 88% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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