Some people believe school cafeterias should stop selling soft drinks and other high-sugar drinks, while others think students should have a choice in what they drink. Which option do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In recent times, people should able to understand and choose what will be of good advantage to them. Students must able to decide on type of drinks he prefers in their school cafeterias. I agree with the idea of students choosing what they drink. I feel this way for several reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, students must allow choosing their drinks because they understand their body system. Some people cannot take low calories drinks because of how their system functions. Thus, telling such person not to take high-sugar drinks is like poisoning his system. Students must have freedom of selecting their drinks. For instance, my friend is suffering from disease called ‘hypoglycaemia’, she takes drinks of high-calories because doctor said she is having low sugar level in her body. Taking this will always replenish her sugar level, assuming the school cafeteria is not selling high-sugar drinks or soft drinks, how would she survive? Therefore, students must have the opportunity to select their drinks since they know more of their body.
Secondly, all citizens have rights to choose and do whatever they want. The same right should be given to the students. They should not impose anything on them. Let them have freedom to choose whatever drinks they want. They are mature enough to handle such case without any interference. My personal experience as an example, when I was in high school, I prefer to drink any kind of drinks be it soft drink or low sugar drinks. It’s my money, nobody can dictate to me on how to spend my money.
In conclusion, I agree with the idea of student choosing the type of drinks they prefer because they understand their health more than anyone and allow them exercise their rights to choose what they want.
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... their rights to choose what they want.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, kind of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 303.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95379537954 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52104605096 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528052805281 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 439.2 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.3298883495 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.0 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.9473684211 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15789473684 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.32558298894 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114212754494 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681714301 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.207803963952 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036050888749 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 11.7677419355 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.13 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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