Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People might be buried in deep thought when they initially see the statement that when busy parents do not have much time to spend with their children, whether the best use of that time should be spending on doing sports or games or something related to schoolwork. Some people argue as if it is the commonly accepted truth that parents should play games with their children, while others hold a different idea that it is better to do something related to schoolwork for parents. Frankly speaking, from my perspective, there are more demerits than merits to choose the second opinion. In this essay, I would like to take a closer look at the statement based on the following points.
The most immediate point is that playing games or sports do strengthen the relationships between parents and children. It is as clear as daylight that children are craving for playing with their parents because games and sports are interesting for most children. I can think of no better illustration than the example of my niece. She is 6 years old, and always asked her parents to play games with her, especially her favorite game--- The pink pig, which is a puzzle game. But her parents are too busy to play with her. As a result, she became introvert and does not want to talk to her parents. On children's day, her parents promised to play the game with her, and that made her day. Therefore, it is evident that parents should spend more time with their children to make them happy.
Another point worth mentioning is that playing sports games with children can reinforce skills of them such as teamwork spirit and collaboration. It is widely admitted that education is quite important for children. If parents do not have a lot of time instructing their children, that would be a problem. Therefore, the best of time is to make that up through playing sports with children. For instance, football is a sport which requires everyone to cooperate or it will never get succeed. Parents can teach their children how to play football well and instruct them the significance of working with others. I think that would be so helpful and meaningful for their children. Not only do they enjoy the game itself, but also learn how to grow. Don’t you think that the example quoted above is persuasive enough to demonstrate my point?
Further lending credence to my position is that games and sports can remind parents how to smile like children. It is crucially important that parents should make their children love them and have the willingness to spend time with them. Parents are always working so hard for the entire family. In most times, they seldom smile, which makes their children are a little scared of them. Therefore, games are the best solution. They can release their stresses and enjoy the time with their children.
Having weighed the points above, I have no choice but to reiterate my personal point of view that only spending time play games or sports with children can parents make friends with their children ; only by sharing more time with their children can parents know their kids better; only by playing sports with their children can parents instruct their children more efficiently.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Further,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, frankly, if, look, second, so, then, therefore, well, while, for instance, i think, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2652.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 549.0 407.700716846 135% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8306010929 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84053189512 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44458314992 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.428051001821 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 771.3 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.1604445607 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7142857143 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6071428571 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.10714285714 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 22.0 11.8709677419 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.398679505238 0.236089414692 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118631329673 0.076458572812 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112475090762 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.270171738 0.150856017488 179% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0669862952358 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 10.002688172 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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