Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things related to schoolwork.
No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of playing games or sports. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely select the second option. In my firm belief, it is better for children to play games and sports instead of doing things that are related to school work for two different reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, I believe that children could learn so many useful things when they play games or sports. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. For instance, when I was ten, I was one of the members of some football team in my school. Before that I used to be lonely. I did not have any friends and I did not enjoy doing anything in my life. After spending some time with the other members of team, my life changed. I had more friends and I could have some fun. I think the reason that event changed my life is because of the nature of being as a member of the group. In group you can learn how to contribute with the other people, you have more chance to make some new friends. As a result, I think that playing could even change your personality. This reason can vividly show us the importance of the playing games or sports.
Secondly, I think playing sports or games can make some person more energetic and that could help that person's learning process. For example, bowling is one of my favourite kind of sports. Every time I play bowling I can feel that I have much more energy than before and I can learn something in a short period of time. You see, when play sports or games you feel more alive and happy. That energy could really help you to concentrate better and learn better. The reasons like that could show you how much playing is vital for everyone.
Finally, I think when children do something related to their schoolwork they can get bored and that you make them sad and depressed. For example, you can not expect some teenage boy only to study and do not have any fun. That would eventually make that teenage boy disappointed and sad. Therefore, playing have a lots of major effects on the other part of every person’s life.
In the light of above mentioned reasons. I think that playing could really help children especially when their parents are busy. I think some of the major reasons for this topic is that children could learn some valuable things in playing games or sports, they can have better learning process and they can have more fun and feel alive.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: is that
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Suggestion: to process
...d that could help that persons learning process. For example, bowling is one of my favo...
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Suggestion: period
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Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...elp you to concentrate better and learn better. The reasons like that could show you h...
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Suggestion: a lot; lots
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, kind of, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 22.0 11.0286738351 199% => OK
Pronoun: 69.0 43.0788530466 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.50215517241 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.28062357019 2.67179642975 85% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.439655172414 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 643.5 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 9.59856630824 219% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.5712982658 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.3703703704 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1851851852 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.81481481481 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30954063195 0.236089414692 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.083551507917 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675182828408 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179002867348 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555207569707 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 58.1214874552 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.52 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.93 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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