Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things related to schoolwork. Which one do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In recent years technological and industrial enhancements made so many things easier for humans. However, parents may have to confront with serious issues like the little time they can spend with their families especially their children. Some people believe that it would be better if they do funny things with their children like playing games and sports. While, some other may decided to use this short time to work with their kids and help them do their homework. Personally, I prefer to spend my time doing sports and games with my child for two main reasons.
First, both of the goals can be achieved in that condition. Children spend most of their school time in classrooms learning different lessons. So, there would not be enough time for them to play and be actively ingaged in an action that they like to perform. If parents play with them in their after school period, beneficial points can be taught to them through these games and sports. For example, my friend, Jim, is a teacher and he normally has to be present at school for covering both shifts. Thus, he has not much time to spend with his daughter. On the other hand, he told me that when he gets home late in the afternoon, he wants to play simple games with his daughter that she mostly likes and during these games he tries to teach her needed points related to her schoolwork. She responds to this playing willingly and they experience a nice evening where her daughter enjoyed it, and also learned something from the games for her schoolwork.
Second, children tend to learn more faster in situations where they are active and happy. When parents came exhusted from work late, they should know that their kids are tired of school and its long hours. Therefore, they love to do something different that can eject their energy. For instance, I used to work at night with my son doing his homework, But, he reluctantly just finish them as fast as he could without any passion. However, when I tried to teach him during a football match, he even forgot the time and happily do it.
In conclusion, parents should understand that they must use their little time with their kids efficiently. It would be better if they spend it playing a game or sport, since it can help them to work with them comfortably and their kids can enjoy their time with them too.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 32, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'faster' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: faster
...rk. Second, children tend to learn more faster in situations where they are active and...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1928.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67961165049 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29149352954 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6899231544 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.9 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342322622565 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116609720617 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0846601981115 0.0737576698707 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2365481602 0.150856017488 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104263207435 0.0645574589148 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 58.1214874552 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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