Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things related to schoolwork. Which one do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In recent years technological and industrial enhancements made so many things easier for humans. However, parents may have to confront with serious issues like the little time they can spend with their families especially their children. Some people believe that it would be much better if they do funny things with their children like playing games and sports. While, some other may decided to use this short time to work with their kids and help them do their homework. Personally, I prefer to spend my time doing sports and games with my child for two main reasons.
First, both of these goals would be achievable in that condition. Children spend most of their school time in classrooms learning different lessons. So, there would not be enough time for them to play and be actively engaged in an action that they like to perform. If parents choose to play with them in their after school period, beneficial points can be taught to them through these games and sports. For example, my friend, Jim, is a teacher and he normally has to be present at school for covering both shifts. Thus, he has not much time to spend with his daughter. On the other hand, he told me that when he gets home late in the afternoon, he wants to play favorite games of his daughter that she mostly likes to participate. During these games he tries to work with her about related points she needed to learn for her school homework. She responds to this playing willingly and they experience a nice evening where her daughter enjoyed it and also learned something from the games for her schoolwork. So, in this condition not only can we fulfill our kids tasks with them but also they would have a good memory about it.
Second, children tend to learn faster in situations where they are active and feel happy. When parents came exhausted from work late, they should know that their kids are tired of school stuff and may not want to continue it at home too. Therefore, they love to do something different that can increase their energy. For instance, I used to work at night with my son doing his homework, But, he reluctantly just finish them as fast as he could without any passion. However, when I tried to teach him during a football match, he even forgot the time and happily do it.
In conclusion, parents should understand that they must use their little time with their kids efficiently. It would be better if they spend it playing a game or sport, since it can help them to work with them comfortably and their kids can enjoy their time with them too.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 9.8082437276 184% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 84.0 43.0788530466 195% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2103.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 453.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64238410596 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61343653406 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29043351748 2.67179642975 86% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479028697572 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.636498516 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5909090909 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5909090909 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27272727273 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.322573717678 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108320818057 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0823028423136 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.233283360366 0.150856017488 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105431855311 0.0645574589148 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 58.1214874552 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.0 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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