Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to s

Nowadays, an increasing number of people are concerned about the best ways for the busy parents to company their children. However, whether it is better to use that time to have fun playing games or sports than doing things together that are related to schoolwork is a controversial issue. My view is that it is best for the busy parents to spend their time on having fun playing games or sports in order to company their kids.

First, it is obvious that playing games or sports could make the children feel happier than doing the things related to homework since busy parents have so little time to company their kids. This is because for almost kids, they usually want to have the great memory with their parents and to them, doing the homework is not a wonderful time at all. What's more, all kids would tend to play games and have fun in their leisure, which usually needs to have others to play together. In this respect, playing the games with the kids is a better choice for the parents to company their kids and make them have a good memory with them. So, it is best to use the time having fun playing or sports rather than doing things like schoolwork.

Moreover, teaching kids their homework may sometimes be a burden for parents and would even become a bad memory between the kids and the parents. For example, my aunt always complains about how tiring and annoying it is for her to teach my young sister math and Chinese, since my aunt is often busy in her work and my young sister have a great tendency for playing games, which causes her to distract from study easily even when my aunts is overseeing her doing her homework. So, obviously, compared with doing homework, my young sister would be more pleasure and willing to let my aunt to have fun playing games together and thinks it a better company.

This is not to say that doing the homework or something related to the schoolwork is not a kind of company of parents to their kids. Of cause, doing things together that are relevant to homework is also a symbol of the company and expectation of the parents since they often want their kids to learn better than them and have a better job in the future. But company is a two-side thing which is related to both parents and the kids, and what the company is should not be determined just by the parents.

In sum, we should suggest the parents to use their little time to company their kids by having fun playing games or sports together. Meanwhile, we should not ignore that doing things related to schoolwork is also a kind of parents' company. By doing this, we could make sure that kids and parents could have a great memory with each other and have a better relationship.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...omework is not a wonderful time at all. Whats more, all kids would tend to play games...
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Message: Did you mean 'of course' (=naturally)?
Suggestion: Of course
...nd of company of parents to their kids. Of cause, doing things together that are relevan...
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...ents and the kids, and what the company is should not be determined just by the pa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, may, moreover, so, while, for example, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2215.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 490.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52040816327 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70488508055 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.21330364754 2.67179642975 83% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.355102040816 0.524837075471 68% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 659.7 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 51.7874281681 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.294117647 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8235294118 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.29411764706 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423741285932 0.236089414692 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.186919812227 0.076458572812 244% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106907879161 0.0737576698707 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.291257029644 0.150856017488 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.14456757915 0.0645574589148 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.44 58.1214874552 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.53 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.67 8.01818996416 83% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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