Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Other believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to s

Nowadays, an increasing number of people are concerned about the best ways for the busy parents to company their children in their leisure. However, whether it is a better way to spend the time to have fun playing games or sports than to do things together that are related to schoolwork is a controversial issue. My view is that it is best for the parents to have fun with their children playing the games or sports rather than doing things related to the homework.

First, it is obvious that playing games together is helpful to maintain and improve the relationship between the parents and their kids. This is because as we know, the best way to keep in touch with and maintain good relationship with somebody is to find what he or she likes and do this thing together with him/her---- this also makes sense for the children. And for the most kids, their major favorites are the games and the sports, which stands out the importance of the games and sports as the medium of communication between parents and their children. So, it is very important for parents to choose playing games and sports as their company with their kids.

Moreover, at present, teaching kids homework has become a heavy burden for parents, especially for the busy parents, with the difficulties of the students' homework increasing. For example, my aunt always complains about how hard and tiring it is for her to teach my seven-year-old sister math and Chinese. This comes form that my aunt is a manager of a small company with heavy business work, causing her to have little time to teach her daughter homework while my young sister is easily distracted from the study by the television or the games of her phone, even when my aunt is watching her doing her homework. So, in this respect, why not let the parents give the task of teaching homework to others else, who are more specialized in this kind of jobs, and mainly put their little leisure to company their kids with doing something relaxing and happy, such as playing games or outdoor sports?

This is not to say that parents should not help and teach their kids about how to do the schoolwork. Of cause, to some extent, parents could help young people have a good habit of study, such as finishing their homework on time and so on. But this does not mean that parents could see the games as the terrible monster, who would affect their kids' study and even bury their promising future. In contrast, parents should be aware of that games could also offer a window for the kids to learn about the world and do better in the future.

In sum, we should suggest the parents, especially those busy parents, to company their kids by playing games or sports. Meanwhile, we should not ignore that games could also give a window for the kids to chase knowledge. By doing this, we could make sure that parents could have a good relationship with their children and have great and wonderful memory with them.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 607, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to play'.
Suggestion: to play
...is very important for parents to choose playing games and sports as their company with ...
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Line 5, column 147, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...y parents, with the difficulties of the students homework increasing. For example, my au...
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Line 5, column 756, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e more specialized in this kind of jobs, and mainly put their little leisure to c...
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Line 7, column 102, Rule ID: OF_CAUSE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'of course' (=naturally)?
Suggestion: Of course
...ir kids about how to do the schoolwork. Of cause, to some extent, parents could help you...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, while, for example, in contrast, kind of, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2427.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 521.0 407.700716846 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.65834932821 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.77759609229 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36507898576 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.408829174664 0.524837075471 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 710.1 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.3730136383 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 134.833333333 100.406767564 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9444444444 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.335042351233 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129141219677 0.076458572812 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0879347429514 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223091630369 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108457505309 0.0645574589148 168% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.1575268817 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.34 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 86.8835125448 77% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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