Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It stands to reason that time management is approximately difficult in this hectic modern life, so many parents have some challenges to handle required time with their children. In this regard, some contention arises as to in which approach parents can assign their time with their young adults. One common view is that they can allocate their time to have fun playing games or sports. However, the others believe that it is better to help their children in doing some school assignments. I concur with the former point of view, and in what follows, I will present and elaborate on two reasons to substantiate my answer.
The first point which deserves some words here is that it actually can deplete children's excitement. Foremost, children have a lot of stress in school and when do fun playing games or sports with their parents after school, they potentially will relieve their tensions. Furthermore, they acquire a lot of energy to do their homework and also become ready for starting a new day tomorrow. To explain more, parents are working every day and have a little time to spend with their son, so they decide to assign this time to play a marvelously fast car driving game, which their son likes a lot, with him. After a while, their son will be a very happy and energetic boy instead of being bored one because of doing that amusement with his parents. Moreover, he will be actually successful in school and obtain best grades in school.
The second reason that should be mentioned here is that it will astoundingly enhance children's self-confidence. When children receive their parents’ affection and notice in fun playing games or sports after school time, they will flourish and be more confident person in their life. Besides, they learn how to cooperate in a shared activity and become a responsible person in their life. All of these impressively give them a sense of confidence, which is actually helpful for their personality. To illustrate more, when a daughter and her parents do volleyball every day with each other, she receives a lot of notice and care from parents, and she also learn responsibility as a team member. As a result, she actually experiences confidence in their relationship, which can perfectly boost her self-confidence.
In conclusion, when parents allocate their free time to children and play a game or sport with each other, children's negative energy potentially will diminish and their self-confidence surprisingly boost. It is highly recommended that governments consider some useful policies to decrease work time for parents who both works. It can actually enhance in development of children’s social skills.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 526, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('marvelously') instead an adjective, or a noun ('game') instead of another adjective.
...they decide to assign this time to play a marvelously game, which their son likes a lot. After a w...
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Line 3, column 620, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'learns'.
Suggestion: learns
...ice and care from parents, and she also learn responsibility of them. As a result, sh...
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Line 3, column 676, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'receives'.
Suggestion: receives
...lity of them. As a result, she actually receive confidence in their relationship, which...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, while, as to, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2156.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 428.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03738317757 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.548423998 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79763354074 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497663551402 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1090016478 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.8 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.402879260704 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123200986559 0.076458572812 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0937101320956 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.268391197808 0.150856017488 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0805457500427 0.0645574589148 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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