Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It stands to reason that time management is approximately difficult in this hectic modern life, so many parents have some challenges to handle required time with their children. In this regard, some contention arises as to in which approach parents can assign their time with their young adults. One common view is that they can allocate their time to have fun playing games or sports. However, the others believe that it is better to help their children in doing some school assignments. I concur with the former point of view, and in what follows, I will present and elaborate on two reasons to substantiate my answer.
The first point which deserves some words here is that it actually can deplete children's excitement. Foremost, children have a lot of stress in school and when do fun playing games or sports with their parents after school, they potentially will relieve their tensions. Furthermore, they acquire a lot of energy to do their homework and also become ready for starting a new day tomorrow. To explain more, parents are working every day and have a little time to spend with their son, so they decide to assign this time to play a marvelously fast car driving game, which their son likes a lot, with him. After a while, their son will be a very happy and energetic boy instead of being bored one because of doing that amusement with his parents. Moreover, he will be actually successful in school and obtain best grades in school.
The second reason that should be mentioned here is that it will astoundingly enhance children's self-confidence. When children receive their parents’ affection and notice in fun playing games or sports after school time, they will flourish and be more confident person in their life. Besides, they learn how to cooperate in a shared activity and become a responsible person in their life. All of these impressively give them a sense of confidence, which is actually helpful for their personality. To illustrate more, when a daughter and her parents do volleyball with each other every day, she receives a lot of notice and care from parents, and also learn responsibility as a team member. As a result, she actually experiences confidence in their relationship, which can perfectly boost her self-confidence.
In conclusion, when parents allocate their free time to children and play a game or sport with each other, children's negative energy potentially will diminish and their self-confidence surprisingly boost. It is highly recommended that governments consider some useful policies to decrease work time for parents who both works. It can actually enhance in development of children’s social skills.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, while, as to, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2224.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 440.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05454545455 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57997565096 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.811267177 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506818181818 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.5647630339 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.2 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.403274545575 0.236089414692 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124118995313 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0949870423825 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271529750652 0.150856017488 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0676528965266 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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