Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is axiomatic that in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, parents have not sufficient time to spend it with their children. However, it is necessary for every father and mother to allocate a specific time to their kids. While many individuals believe that parents should play with their children, on the other hand, some others hold the opinion that they have to aid their kids in their lessons. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the former opinion, and the reasons to support my idea are presented in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that children need a huge amount of entertainment in their childhood since at this age, having fun and enjoys their moments is one of the most important goals for them. In fact, many kids have difficulties in their daily life such as assignments, projects, learning new lessons to name but a few. So it is too demanding for them if they want to spend their free time practicing their lessons with their parents. Not only do their exercise with father and mother in the home make them boring but also they will hate studying in the future. My own experience will bring this notion home. When I was a primary school student, my mother used to review the lessons for me. Since she was working for an electrical company, she did not have free time during the week, and only at the weekend she can spend her time with me but it was not pleasurable for me because I really bombard with the huge amount of homework. So I prefer to do other activities with my parents and working with my mother on my lessons had a side effect on my studying.
Moreover, due to the fact that children need to be healthy, and since they have a huge amount of energy, they have to do physical activities to maintain their body in good shape. Because nowadays, most of the kids use to play video games, they have the sedentary lifestyle in which make a lot of dire consequences to them. According to this situation, parents should involve them in physical activities to not only quench their thirst for movements but also help them to prevent obesity. In recent decades, since humans take advantage of new technology, they use to devote their tasks to machines like doing laundry, ironing, and washing dishes. Also in the past children had to learn these household tasks and they had to do a lot of physical activities.
In conclusion, having the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I do believe that parents should involve to play with their children in their spare time. Because kids become tired of their lessons and it is not effective for them to talk about schools and their lessons, and also most of the children need physical activities.
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Suggestion: used
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, really, so, while, in conclusion, in fact, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2250.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 482.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66804979253 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68556276237 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51246783454 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464730290456 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 698.4 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.3362169649 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.421052632 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3684210526 20.6045352989 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21052631579 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324000956472 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109736885763 0.076458572812 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0794015730624 0.0737576698707 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227770218789 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432105609281 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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