Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
It is axiomatic that in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, the rulers have to consider situations in which aid their countries. Activities such as hosting Fifa World cup, spending money on sponsoring art galleries to name but a few. While many people hold the opinion that the governments should dedicate finance for the enhancement of sports, on the other hand, some individuals believe that provide money to support artists. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the former opinion, and the reasons to support my idea are presented in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, due to the fact that most of the countries in modern times take effort to become a leading one in the world. So as to be the host of the sports competition is one of the means in which help a nation to show their advancement. In fact, if the governors allocate money on sports events such as Olympic not only helps a country to improve the sports club but also it brings a significant amount of money for citizens. For example, governments have enhanced their teams and prepare them for these kinds of events. As a result, athletics can take advantage of high-end facilities provided by the governments; especially, those who play sports at a national level.
Moreover, it is crystal clear that a notion when becoming prosperous that young people spend their time in sports clubs. In this vein, teenagers find the best way for their life also they become useful for society. Although there many ways in order to entertain youngsters but sports activities are one of the most influential methods. Occupying in a specific field of sport not only brings about those young people to maintain their health but also prevents them doing robbery or fraudulent. An example will bring this notion home. A few years ago, in Azarbaijan- a country in the middle east- the governors started to research about the bedrock of the in their country. They are due to the fact that people after their graduation from their college did not find a suitable job they face different problems like poverty and lack of entertainment. Consequently, the rulers decided to expand their sports infrastructures to make playgrounds for individuals. After a few years, they analyzed and scrutinized that youngsters now occupy with sports and the rate of criminal had been reduced.
In conclusion, having the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I strongly believe that devoting money to sports is beneficial. Because it aids a country to be famous in the world and its nation take advantages of sports events and also it help to decrease the crimes.
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...advantages of sports events and also it help to decrease the crimes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, if, moreover, so, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2195.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93258426966 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76740090413 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543820224719 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 669.6 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2861488068 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.75 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130236426384 0.236089414692 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0383277081912 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0534077396998 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0889583803393 0.150856017488 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0859829420508 0.0645574589148 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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