Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying in today's complicated world where we live, society distrubite to different assortments which every stratum comprise manifold policy and criteria. In fact, in modern era some individuals because of their vocation need specefic privacy like actors, football players , etc. Although a majority of people do not beleive respect to celebrities privacy is a big concern, but in my point of veiw they require a good level of freedom and privacy which I will explain reasons in following paraghraphs.
First, it is crystal clear that in recent decades due to genesis of new technology like advance in television broadcasting and increasment in cinema, a lot of movie and sereies have produced. In this vein, this programs cause to introduce a plethora of new actors and actress. And also due to enhancement of social media people can follow their favorite movie stars , nevertheless in past individuals can watch actors only in cinema and they might forget them. So as to individuals know their celebrites and for instance when they go to a restaurant they can bother their favorite actress by taking a signiture or taking a huge amount of pictures. So it is inevitable that celebrites need peace in common places in order to pleasure form being in society.
Second, some careers like being actor or actress always have manifold problem. Although many entertainers take advantage of their job and they become famous among people, but this work is like double edge sword. In fact, a majority of celebrites have dilemma in their private life. For example, they have bitter divorce from his or her wife and they do not incline that magazines and newspapers release information about their personal life. To put it in a more vivid picture, I remeber one of the most well-known TV producer in Iran contributed in a murder, although he was totally inoocent but media had written about this news for a few month. Finally, by magnisize of journalists occured a scandal for him and he totally lost all of his famous. One the big aftermath was that nobody trust him in work and he suffer from fiscal problems because he had lost his source of money. So as to everybody have to pay attention to this idea that celebrites need a high level of privacy because of sensivity of their work.
In conclusion, having considered these reasons into account, well-known individuals require more privacy in their life. Not only have peace of mind in common places, but also because their vocation they need that people and media respect to them.
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...broadcasting and increasment in cinema, a lot of movie and sereies have produced. In this vein...
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...y in cinema and they might forget them. So as to individuals know their celebrites and f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, nevertheless, second, so, well, as to, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2112.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92307692308 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65011718745 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536130536131 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4369132432 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.333333333 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8333333333 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61111111111 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159586279105 0.236089414692 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0528366443547 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043761300224 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105539846625 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0361780998462 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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