Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is axiomatic that in this progressive and sophisticated world where we live, human beings have to consider obligations to have a successful life in modern societies. While many people believe rulers legitimate so strict rules for youngsters, on the other hand, some individuals hold the opinion that regulations are not hard and demanding for young people. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the former opinion, and the reasons to support my idea are presented in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that every nation needs respect and discipline in their countries. In fact, there is a common belief among mankind that only societies will be successful in which consider strict rules and regulations to their teenager. Since in these ages, educators can sow the seeds of revere and way of living in the children; however, the human is an intelligent creature but the best ages to learn is the young hood. My own experience can bring this notion home. A few years ago, when I was a high school student, my cousin and I used to gather every weekend and playing football in playground proximity to our neighborhood. When our playing came over, my cousin continued his play until 12 p.m; as a result, he had to play with fellows who were smoking and they used bad languages, but I came back home early and I had my own rule. Consequently, my cousin used to addictive to cigarette and he ruined his future, only because he came from a country which they did not pay attention to rule for teenagers.
Moreover, schools are the most important places which could raise children in a proper manner. To be more specific, educators should make an effort to codify methods due to the basics of instructive ethics. In this vein, students who have been graduated from these institutions could be a useful person for their society. For example, if a child learns to participate in charity programs, he or she will become a generous individual since this child is instructed in a proper way. Not only educating learners in a fine method helps society to be flourishing in the future but also it prevents many disastrous problems at all. For instance, a few decades, I remembered that the government in my country decided to allocate a huge amount of independence to the students in order to made decisions in their own colleges. so, for many years, students grew with a method in which did, not the researcher studied it. The aftermath of this education system is that today, younger and although their next-generation suffers from discipline; so, these days we face a lot of disorders in our society that bring about various problems for citizens.
In conclusion, having the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I do believe that a nation needs strict rules for young people. Because it helps society become budding and also a country could rise, useful people, which permits different deficiencies in societies.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, moreover, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2454.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88844621514 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78378881508 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.545816733068 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 769.5 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.3103913628 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.7 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14583621098 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0430665726795 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526374560109 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105760897669 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506329007534 0.0645574589148 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 86.8835125448 143% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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