Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork.
It is critically important to have a right attitude toward children's nurture, as it can affect their future life profoundly. I am of the opinion that most of the children's times should be filled with educational and school-related activities. I think this way based on two main reasons, which I will explore in what follows.
To begin with, being involved in educational tasks, children will be able to identify their talents with the aid of their parents, which paves the way for having a successful future. To clarify, one of the most important factors contributing to children's success in the future is sufficient practice in their interests so that they can be expert in their favorite field when it comes to choosing a career. However, this is not easily possible, given the fact that in school environments most teachers encourage students to go through fields that are considered to be with more job prospects. In fact, they deprive pupils to find their own latent abilities, making their minds biased toward their future. This, in turn, will take its toll on children's professional future and may affect their lives negatively. Knowing this, home environment with supervision of parents is a perfect opportunity for parents to provide a suitable bed for their offspring so that they can try various fields of study which will be taught in school. In this manner, without feeling any pressure from their surroundings, children will be able to show their tendency toward their interests, which not only helps them to do their favorite educational tasks, but also helps their parents to guide them properly.
To add, performing tasks associated with school will prepare children for their school time, and they will have an easy time dealing with their courses. In other words, nowadays, with advancement of science in various spheres, scientific courses have been made extremely heavy in order to prepare them for the advanced and science-oriented world in the future and require students to put a great deal effort in order to succeed. This change in educational curriculum of students has been so dramatic that many students get surprised dealing with their school courses. Under such circumstance, it is of extreme importance for children to be prepared in advance so that they can digest this sophisticated level knowledge in their minds. In this regard, parents can provide their children with proper introductory courses and practices, which can be conducive to finding a rational view of their courses in school. Practicing in this way, children will be more likely to succeed in their schools.
In short, I strongly subscribe to the idea that children should be involved in activities that resembles their school tasks. Not only does this manner helps them and their families to see in which kind of fields they are more interested, but also they will practice school activities in advance, which will help them be prepared for their school.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 152, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'help'?
Suggestion: help
...school tasks. Not only does this manner helps them and their families to see in which...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, i think, in fact, in short, kind of, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 52.1666666667 150% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2481.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 486.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1049382716 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71491200153 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481481481481 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 730.8 618.680645161 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.614164131 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.833333333 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.155084500151 0.236089414692 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0648589206029 0.076458572812 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475705708402 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109137751841 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425359090183 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 11.7677419355 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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