Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to sc

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Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

The entertainment of the children in a busy family always has been a challenging issue. In most family both parents are occupied, so they have less time to spend with their children, or after coming back from work, they do not have enough energy to play with their children or involve with their activities. Therefore, children have to spend their time with themselves or their friends. I prefer that children devote their time to the fun playing games or sports, and I have two significant reasons for it.

First of all, children should have fun. All around the world, children are supposed to be happy and alive. In addition, they could have a hobby to enjoy against the hard homework at school which takes a long and mostly disgusting time to do. Most children have shown that playing game especially sports with more mobility, are really enjoyable. So playing games like video games is a good medium to make children happier.

Secondly, the number of experiences that are given to the children at school has a particular threshold. Because the schools have certain rules and standards that children have to act in its frame. Therefore, the children have less flexibility and freedom to do various tasks or experience new things. Sports and playing games with friends or even themselves provide this opportunity to obtain varied expertise and knowledge. Children even can find and bloom their talents during playing sports and playing games.

All in all, I believe that sports and playing games that are out of school are more beneficial than do the tasks related to the schoolwork. Because I think children can have more fun with playing and enjoy of their time rather than doing the homework. In addition, I believe that the benefits and advantages like experiences and discovering the children's talents are more than doing things together which are related to schoolwork.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ldren or involve with their activities. Therefore children have to spend their time with ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...that children have to act in its frame. Therefore the children have less flexibility and ...
^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, i think, in addition, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1572.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 315.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99047619048 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5273629771 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.479365079365 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 465.3 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.3496358816 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.4705882353 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5294117647 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.05882352941 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.424352625426 0.236089414692 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148328371155 0.076458572812 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0827084903326 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277801705906 0.150856017488 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0679610091639 0.0645574589148 105% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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