Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to sc

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Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

In the past, most fathers and mothers use to decied the futuer of their young girls and sones. On other hand, In this period of time, I totally agree that most families give their children the chance to choice what they want in life in contrast to the old generation. The bases of my point are parents become more educated and young people become more responsiable.

First of all, on the education level, Parents currentaly are more educated in comperson of old people. Since most our fathers and mothers get to schools they had the chance to read and the get the knowlege about how freedom is important. Hence, they give their youngest the chance to explore life and to choose what they want in life and experince their own choices. The best to demonstrate this by my personal experince. My father used to support me in my decitions even if they were wrong. He has the concept of making me learn from my own mistakes. To illustrate, when I finishef high school it was the time to choose a college and to escpicilized in certain filed my father did not force me to study a major that he want. In contrast, my grandfather forced him to study law which has a negative impact on his career. If my father was not educated, he well not allow me to make my personal chooses in life. So, I believe because current parents got educated, they give their children the chance to make their own preference in life.

Second, with the tremendous positive development in this time, the currant generation become more responsiable. In paticular, the different lows and ruls young people become more orinted and serious about their choices. Further, with the innovation of the communication and information exchange thanks to internet, individual become more aware and they understand the consequencies of their bad decitions. Opposite to what our parents have, their fathers had lack of knowledge about the things and they want to protect them by perventing them to try new thing in life. For instance, In this modren era, we all now what is the concequencess of breaking a road reuls, so during driving we are very carefull to avoid getting a teaket. Hence, If someone had a parking teacket Family are not responsible for it. So, one of the benefits of lows are making people more responsibiles toward their chooses.

In conculsion, I strongly agree that young people have their own voice and do not relay on their parents. I feel this way becuase the fathers and mothers are more educated and young individual become more resposibile.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, second, so, well, for instance, i feel, in contrast, first of all, in contrast to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2091.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 439.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76309794989 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57737117129 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60949227441 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.487471526196 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 664.2 618.680645161 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0058070047 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0454545455 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9545454545 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157895617245 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0469309598971 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443752745044 0.0737576698707 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104594603389 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0155259933212 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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