Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In the past, most fathers and mothers use to decide the future of their young girls and sones. On other hand, In this period of time, I totally agree that most families give their children the chance to choose what they want in life in contrast to the old generation. The bases of my point are parents become more educated and young people become more responsible.
First of all, on the education level, Parents currently are more educated in comparison to old people. Since most of our fathers and mothers get to school they had the chance to read and get knowledge about how freedom is important. Hence, they give their youngest the chance to explore life and choose what they want in life and experience their own choices. The best to demonstrate this is through my personal experience. My father used to support me in my decision even if they were wrong. He has the concept of making me learn from my own mistakes. To illustrate, when I finished high school it was time to choose a college and specialize in a certain field my father did not force me to study a major that he want. In contrast, my grandfather forced him to study law which has a negative impact on his career. If my father was not educated, he will not allow me to make my personal choices in life. So, I believe because current parents got educated, they give their children the chance to make their preferences in life.
Second, with the tremendous positive development in this time, the current generation become more responsible. In particular, due to different laws and rules, young people become more oriented and serious about their choices. Further, with the innovation of communication and information exchange thanks to the internet, individuals become more aware and understand the consequences of their bad decisions. Opposite to what our parents have, their fathers had a lack of knowledge about things and they want to protect them by preventing them to try new things in life. For instance, In this modern era, we all know what is the consequences of breaking road rules, so during driving, we are very careful to avoid getting a ticket. Hence, If someone had a parking ticket Family is not responsible for it. So, one of the benefits of laws is making people more responsible for their choices.
In conclusion, I strongly agree that young people have their voice and do not rely on their parents. I feel this way because the fathers and mothers are more educated and young individuals become more responsible.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, second, so, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, in particular, first of all, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2072.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77419354839 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60720369285 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.470046082949 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 657.0 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 4.94265232975 263% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4255417498 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.1818181818 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7272727273 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.59090909091 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229246733509 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0749799437808 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685700790479 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163024255209 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330282259649 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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