Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Personally, I am of the opinion that knowing the global events everyday is critical to us, even those won't literally impact on our daily life. I will illustrate my points with my personally experiences and specific arguments.
First of all, we can broaden our horizons by getting contact with global news. When we watch more and more news and events around the world, we are able to explore the issue or topic which interest us. It is very important and beneficial to us because we cannot assure we won't use the knowledge of that aspect someday, no matter for personal usage or aid to others. Take myself for instance, I have read one piece of news, from Japan, that there were a sequence of action we should take when confronted with earthquake. At that time, I remember it out of curiosity and didn't really consider it important. However, one time, I really bumped into a earthquake and the sequence were aroused into my brain. Thanks to that action we took, we prevented our property and safety from being damaged. This event really taught me a lesson that some global event might really become the key to saving and protecting us one day. Therefore, it is still necessary and important to seize the events around the globe even it might seem not useful and not relevant to our life at that time.
Second, it is vital that we should absorb the information and news around the world since doing so can extend our way and possibility in the future.If we exclusively focus on the domestic new or something which affects our daily life, we won't able to grab the global trend or opportunity to develop some special plan or product. I major in the business relevant department. Hence, it is very helpful for me to understand the events around the world, driving me to contemplate on the chance to find out some business potentials or niche markets. It is quite important to my future career and, at the same time, I just vary me arsenal to the business acumen.
Last but not least, It is a modern generation. We travel a lot and have abundant chances to visit different countries or cultures. Only by realizing the news around the four corners of the world can we notice or understand what we should pay attention to or avoid so as not to irritate or disrespect those hosts. It is very important for us to respect others, and we can do it better merely by virtue of reading global news. Hence, I consider it vital and essential to receive more information or events from different countries.
In conclusion, given the reasons I mentioned above, I believe that stretching out tentacles to desperate countries and places is very critical to us, event it does not really matter in our routine life based on that three arguments. To do so, we can explore more opportunities, receive more information, and make us ready for the upcoming world of traveling. That is why I consider so.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... opinion that knowing the global events everyday is critical to us, even those wont lite...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 570, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ime, I remember it out of curiosity and didnt really consider it important. However, ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 646, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...However, one time, I really bumped into a earthquake and the sequence were arouse...
^
Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...d our way and possibility in the future.If we exclusively focus on the domestic ne...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, really, second, so, still, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2379.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67387033399 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59094819183 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489194499018 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 773.1 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 25.0 9.59856630824 260% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.0803194015 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.434782609 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1304347826 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82608695652 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106840878269 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0336655679836 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0293242983243 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0558952674026 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302550037119 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... opinion that knowing the global events everyday is critical to us, even those wont lite...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 570, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ime, I remember it out of curiosity and didnt really consider it important. However, ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 646, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...However, one time, I really bumped into a earthquake and the sequence were arouse...
^
Line 5, column 149, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...d our way and possibility in the future.If we exclusively focus on the domestic ne...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, really, second, so, still, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 30.0 13.8261648746 217% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2379.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67387033399 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59094819183 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489194499018 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 773.1 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 25.0 9.59856630824 260% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.0803194015 48.9658058833 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.434782609 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1304347826 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.82608695652 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106840878269 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0336655679836 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0293242983243 0.0737576698707 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0558952674026 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0302550037119 0.0645574589148 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.