Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
How to use family time is always a controversial issue since the activities parents choose to do would influence their children very much. Some people believe that accompanying children doing activities which are related to schoolwork is practical and helpful for their future. However, in my opinion, I disagree with the idea because of the two reasons I would like to explore in the following essays.
First of all, the parents have the responsibility to maintain the family's health, and spending time playing games and sports is a preferable choice. Since not only children study very hard in the school in a week but also adults get many stresses from their works. Using the spare time to experience the nature and different things can help a whole family release pressures and even recover their bodies. To make my family as an example, we go mountain climbing every available weekend. Through the process of exercising our body and enjoying the landscapes, we can forget anxiety and nervousness from exams or the works. On the contrary, in some weekend which we did not have time to go out together, I would feel tired and upset before I went back for work. As a result, I support that parents should spend time on having fun with their children.
Secondly, playing games and sports help children explore and cultivate their interest. Because the contents that kids would learn in the course and textbook are academic and not related to career, if children only spend their time to participate in the schoolwork, it would be difficult for them to find out their real interest. For instance, my cousin whose parents strictly asked him to do the schoolwork every weekend was a computer engineer two years ago. In his school life, he did not know how to decide his career path since the only thing he was allowed to do and contacted with was studying. Therefore, it became a miserable time for him when he stepped into the society and started to work since he realized that he does not like computer engineering at all. In the end, he chose to resign and start finding his dream job in his late twenty.
In conclusion, based on the above I mentioned, I suggested parents use some time to accompany their kids having fun. Since playing game and sports can keep family healthier and give the children opportunities to search their interest.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80445544554 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54713794765 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529702970297 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.0546995276 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.833333333 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4444444444 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35225820992 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114698978869 0.076458572812 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.098449881399 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232131026688 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0517400413528 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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