Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Rarely anyone could escape the business of the modern world. Parents are often bogged down by their occupational responsibility that leaves them little time for their children. This fact makes the limited, valuable time parents have with their offspring very important, and one should seriously consider how is this time best spent? Some may prefer to use this time to have fun with each other; others are more academically oriented and may choose to work on schoolwork together. In my personal opinion, I believe that this invaluable time is best spent on having fun.
Let us first look at the issue at hand from the perspective of the children. Would a eight-year-old or a twelve-year-old wish their parents to work on schoolwork with them after school or they wish to have the parents play with them? Obviously, most children would opt to play. We can see everywhere where parents are dragged by their children to play with them all the time. And when parents do satisfy the children's innate desire for entertainment, a strong subconscious bond between the parents and the children will form. This greatly benefits the stability and warmth of a family.
Aside from the fact that children desire to have fun, playing games and sports with children after school also balances academic and entertaining life for the children. Children would have already have spent most of their time in school on academia. If parents continue to force schoolwork related activities on the little ones, other aspects of the children's potential, such as agility, may become underdeveloped. Therefore, it is beneficial for families to engage in non-academic activities after children get out of school.
Nevertheless, some families may prioritize schoolwork before other activities. Parents of these families believe that helping their sons and daughters academic-wise can bring them a better future. While this may be true, over-emphasizing schoolwork may throttle the children's creativity. For example, Asian parents tend to focus more on academics than their Western counterparts. The effect is quite interesting: Asian youths dominates the international academic realm while Western adults thrive in the grownup academia. This resulted from the fact that Asian children were fed too much schoolwork, causing them to be unable to think for themselves, thus losing their creativity in the long run.
In conclusion, the benefits of parents investing time on entertainment with their children surpass that of spending the valuable time on more schoolwork. Unless the children have a innate inclination for academia and would not enjoy playing games or sports, parents should spend time playing with them, not work on more schoolwork with them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, look, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2304.0 1977.66487455 117% => OK
No of words: 433.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32101616628 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56165014514 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86737644577 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515011547344 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1808680596 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.173913043 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8260869565 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5652173913 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.395792868261 0.236089414692 168% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116425654343 0.076458572812 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0924633596748 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240038237186 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107198688413 0.0645574589148 166% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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