Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
A glance at people attitude towards childhood brings to the light a question that has provoked a debate several times, namely, whether children should divide the extra time in playing games or doing schoolwork. Some people will hypothesis that the young people should exploit that imperative tenure towards playing sports and games and some folks will assert to use that significant time towards the schoolwork which make enhance the kid's life. In my opinion, I believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to do things together related to schoolwork. I feel this way for several reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
The first and the foremost reason is that parents foster their children' horizon broaden by helping them in their study and teaching them new frontier information of the world. Undoubtedly, their punctuality towards their youths wholesome advent and wholesome childhood is the pivotal element.The pertinent example of my life can shed a light on this assertion. For instance, when I was staying with my sister, I saw very exquisite things in her house that she had managed to devote her time with their kids beside her and her husband's hectic schedule. Admittedly, I deduced their incentive and bolstering their kids schoolwork was making them dexterous and intimation in school which is essential key to be successful in their lives. Hence, I believe that spending time with your parents in a vital way is the important for their healthy and prosperous lives.
Another reason that should be taken into the account that some busy parents have profound responsibilities to tackle. Inevitably, childhood is the substantial era in all individuals' lives. Apparently, the children who got a chance to thrive, those kids become successful in their future. In that context, parent's time is the important factor. For example, My mother was a teacher but beside her busy schedule. She gave us her time which was helpful for us to blossom and achieve our goal. In fact, our success belongs to our parents' dedication towards us.
To aforementioned reasons which discussed in the above essay, I strongly believe that spare time, which children get with their parents, they ought to use it towards schoolwork that playing games or sports. This is because of their wholesome development and wholesome childhood.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, first, hence, if, so, for example, for instance, i feel, in fact, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2008.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 397.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05793450882 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66815913119 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501259445844 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3398872785 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.555555556 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0555555556 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.400970207489 0.236089414692 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122000479756 0.076458572812 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.164535925972 0.0737576698707 223% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247123942032 0.150856017488 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.131789647413 0.0645574589148 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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