Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
From my perspective, I believe it is better to spend time by having fun with their children. People are running towards an unknown target and had no time to relax or enjoy with their children. So, I state my view in the following essay.
First and foremost, health is considered to be an essential reason for both children and the parents. Going to school 9 hours a day and 6 days a week, children has no time to have fun and bonding with their family. Plus, parents engaging with their will certainly enhance the level of affection between them. For instance, one of my cousin who stayed in the hostel from his early age was affected by mental illness and stress. Because of that, his parents took their time to entertain and play with him, which cured him eventually. Thus, keeping in mind about the children's health, it is better to take some time off and play with them.
Additionally, children spends half of their time in school and half of their time writing homework at home. In order to refresh their brain and to distract them from the studies, it is worth spending time for the parents to play with their kids. Apart from that, studies is not only a success path for the children. To explain, my neighbour trained his son in tennis, which also helped him with the scholarships. Therefore, playing with kids and having fun is better than doing homework with them.
Finally, nowadays children are playing indoors like video games and watching tv. They almost forgot the concept of playing outside. this increases the risk of being health. To avoid this, it is the parents responsibility to distract them from the indoor games and lead them towards the outdoor games.
In conclusion, parents spending time with their children in the ways of playing games and having fun, also helps them to manage stress and stay healthy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, so, therefore, thus, apart from, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1523.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 321.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7445482866 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35670142256 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.538940809969 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 429.3 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.980746307 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.1578947368 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8947368421 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.31578947368 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352742338498 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115301733023 0.076458572812 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.103287752213 0.0737576698707 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.227506218102 0.150856017488 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0822092674572 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 58.1214874552 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 86.8835125448 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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