some people believe that when parents don't have enough time for their children, the best use of this time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others prefer to do things related to kids' schoolwork. which fo do you prefer?
The question of how parents should spend their time efficiently with their children has been debated for many years. Some people prefer to play with their kids in their leisure time. However, others prefer to do some related works to their school works. In my point of view, both of these notions are true because of the following reasons.
To begin with, one should take into account the fact that the game is an inseparable part of the kids' life and it has a crucial role in their nurturing. As a result, although many parents are busy, they should spend considerable time playing a game with their children. Children not only obtain a profuse number of worthwhile experiences in games but also diminished their tension and stress during playing games. My personal experience is a compelling one. When I was a child I was so interested in building a house with my Lego. When I played with my mother she learned me how can I build a dwelling. Had did I destroy it, I would have built it again and again. During this cycle, I could gain a lot of useful experiences about building a house and the right place of any elements of the building also we had a fun time so my tension was balanced spontaneously.
Another remarkable reason is that if parents doing some related work with kids' schoolwork, they will prepare for school. As a result, when they enter the school because of their extra information they have a better sense and they feel proud. Also, they can learn other aspects of the lesson better. My notion on this fact has been profoundly influenced by my experience. Before I went to school my mother taught me some rudimentary aspects of mathematics in her leisure time. So I had a basic knowledge of that. When I entered the school although an abundant number of students didn't know about math, I could add some number to each other one and I knew their equal. That was made me so happy and caused me to feel proudness helped me to learn other mathematical functions easier.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that playing games and working school work with children are so necessary and significant because they earn a lot of proper experiences during games. Also with teaching them, some schoolwork they have a concept of the course that helps them to learn it better and have a better sense.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: kids'; kid's
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...ested in building a house with my Lego. When I played with my mother she learned me ...
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...profoundly influenced by my experience. Before I went to school my mother taught me so...
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...lot of proper experiences during games. Also with teaching them, some schoolwork the...
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Message: Did you mean 'betters', 'wells'?
Suggestion: betters; wells
... the course that helps them to learn it better and have a better sense.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, well, while, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1903.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64146341463 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52530795149 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8656853031 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6363636364 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.72727272727 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267442215481 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821797070329 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0786631895214 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179257769016 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0721096414136 0.0645574589148 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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