Some people enjoy change and they look forward to new experiences. Others like their lives to stay the same, and they don’t change their usual habits. Compare these two approaches to life. Which approach do you prefer? Why?
Looking forward to new experiences and keeping usual habits have their own advantages and disadvantages. In the following paragraph, I will discuss both sides of subject completely and then I will explain my viewpoint and interest to one of choices.
Firstly, doing usual habits which are mandatory and everybody should do, are enjoyable for human-being. In fact, getting up early at the morning, eating meals such as a dinner or a lunch, doing the dishes, taking a shower and brushing teeth, all of these tasks are day-to-day works that people perform them every day. Most of these tasks are really repetitive but pleasant to do, because brushing teeth and taking a shower, bring us a fresh sense or eating dinner when we are hungry, make us to be happy. Even though, one assumes that these usual habits are tiring, overall, when people perform them, they feel enjoyable. Additionally, individuals intend to do some of these repetitive tasks for the sake of gaining money. Indeed, speaking with clients and customers or selling products or performing tasks in a company, all of these ordinary duties are just for the sake of earning permanent salary for performed jobs. They are really enjoyable for all of people because they know that with that every month when they earn money, they will be able to eat food at restaurants, buy clothes, have a trip and other interesting things that are result of gaining monthly salary from a repetitive duties.
However, looking forward to new experiences and taking risk may cause us to be a very successful person. In fact, changing job frequently or traveling to different countries and nations may lead on be successful in profession. For example, if someone take a risk and migrate to other country, s/he may find a good job with high annual salary in a big firm. Moreover, new experience may cause to promote people's jobs. For example, if a person who is unskilled worker and recruited in a company, learns new thing such as operating a machinery, he will be able to work as an operator in the company. As a result, becoming familiar with new thing, job position of people will be promoted.
In conclusion, as I mentioned above, both sides of topic have its own advantages, but in my prospective, I contend that doing new experience and taking risk is better that other one because people will get successful with this, and have better chances in their profession. How can you get more money if you keep your current condition in your career?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, moreover, really, so, then, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2073.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8661971831 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65070044187 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518779342723 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.2866822661 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.941176471 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0588235294 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35294117647 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189739518534 0.236089414692 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633587376521 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450163194956 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10352717737 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0279093345481 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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