Students at universities often have a choice of places to live. They may choose to live in university dormitories, or they may choose to live in apartments in the community. Compare the advantages of living in university housing with the advantages of living in an apartment in the community. Where would you prefer to live?
Undoubtedly, students at the beginning of each semester have two choices for accommodation. Some individuals choose to dwell at on-campus dorms whereas others prefer to reside at an apartment in the community. Each choices has its own advantages that I will discuss them in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, the advantages of living at dormitory are being low-priced. In fact, most of on-campus dormitories have shared-rooms that two or three students rent annually. These shared-rooms required to pay lower amount of money in comparison with apartment at off-campus. For instance, during my study at college in Tehran, I merely spend one hundred dollars monthly for accommodation which I shared room with 3 people. However, it only cost up to two hundred dollars to rent an apartment which costs twice from that of university dorms. Not only that but also I should put aside some money to pay transportation bill in order to arrive to my college. Overall, my monthly expenses will be increased approximately to three hundred dollars. Therefore, an individual who live at an on-campus dorms decreases the expense of housing.
On the other hand, staying at a house outside campus is comfortable. In fact, students could stay awake late at night in order to study, while doing such a task at on-campus dorms are impossible to perform, because most of students intend to sleep early at night. Moreover, if one person want to watch a television program, s/he should ask from their roommates whether they like to watch or not. For example, when my interest is to watch documentary movies at discovery channel, I should be sure that others agree with me or their preference is to watch to other channels. Furthermore, although university dormitories most of them have a kitchen with important staffs such as oven, they must be available to use, since somebody may cook dinner for him of herself. However, this disadvantage is not exist at an apartment that campus dorms has because the apartment is only ready for your use and thus you will be able to cook whenever you want. So, as you can see, living at an apartment is more comfortable that residing at dormitory.
In conclusion, according to above-mentioned reason, I would say that living at on-campus dormitory is better for me because I need money to pay university tuition fees, as residing at a cheap dorm helps me save money, even though the advantage of staying at apartment which is being comfortable, is tempting.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 211, Rule ID: EACH_EVERY_NNS[1]
Message: 'Each' and 'every' are used with singular. Did you mean 'all'?
Suggestion: All
...eside at an apartment in the community. Each choices has its own advantages that I w...
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Line 1, column 224, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'have', 'haven'.
Suggestion: have; haven
...partment in the community. Each choices has its own advantages that I will discuss ...
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Line 5, column 216, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the students') or simply say ''most students''.
Suggestion: most of the students; most students
...orms are impossible to perform, because most of students intend to sleep early at night. Moreove...
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Line 5, column 799, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...self. However, this disadvantage is not exist at an apartment that campus dorms has b...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...comfortable that residing at dormitory. In conclusion, according to above-mentio...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hich is being comfortable, is tempting.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2073.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99518072289 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90389340259 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542168674699 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 648.9 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1830418656 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.105263158 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8421052632 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.84210526316 5.45110844103 181% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249723026168 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0782724652686 0.076458572812 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.058954636592 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16012526501 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00727215902781 0.0645574589148 11% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.72 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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