TPO-34 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Educating children is a more difficult task today than it was in the past because they spend so much time on cell phone, online games, and social networking Web site.U
There is no doubt that new generation is different than the last posterities. They spend their time for technological devices such as mobile phones. The technology has a significant roles in students' life and make it possible for them to easily interact with their friends. This brings up a controversial question regarding to children's education: Is it difficult task for teachers teach and education children, as they spend time one cell phone, online games and so on? In my perspective, I agree with the stance that the teachers have difficulty to educate students at school. The reasons behind this viewpoint are discussed in the following paragraph.
To begin with, the first thing that immediately comes to mind is that children do not participate in classroom discussions. In fact, the professor ask them to question regarding the topics that professor teach, they do not answer them. Children do not ask questions that are beyond class materials. However, students in the class talk with their classmate about newly announced technological devices such as smart phones, gadgets and so forth. Not only that, but also children brings their mobile phones to classes and communicate with their friends and family members through Internet Network, using social media in order to tell a joke to each other. Moreover, children are not focus on class discussion and when the professors ask from them to help them to conclude class lectures, they do not participate well and each student start to turn on their cell phone in order to see whether someone call them or not. As a result of this, teachers have difficulty in teaching them new knowledge because children do not participate in class discussion, although are attend in the classes most time.
The second and important reason that support my standpoint is that adults do not study well. In fact, as I mentioned previously, they do not participate at class discussion. They also do not spend time for reviewing the textbooks and class notes. When adults return back to home from school, they tend to play video game with computer, as well as dedicate in social network such as Facebook and Telegram. Students serve at the internet not for gaining additional information from the subjects, which professors taught them, they rather use internet to play online games or get information on trivial topics including to newly launched movies at the cinema and so on. Additionally, during the time for preparation for final exams, children go to their friend house to speaker rather than for the purpose of studying. Hence, nowadays educating children as well as adults is really an onerous task, because they do not devote their time for studying.
In conclusion, according to above-mentioned factors, I contend that educators have a lot of difficulty in educating children because students do not involve in class discussion and do not study well. If you are an educator, you can understand my points.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 52, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
... doubt that new generation is different than the last posterities. They spend their ...
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Line 2, column 899, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'calls'.
Suggestion: calls
...l phone in order to see whether someone call them or not. As a result of this, teach...
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Line 2, column 1064, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'attended'.
Suggestion: attended
...ipate in class discussion, although are attend in the classes most time. The second a...
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Line 3, column 259, Rule ID: RETURN_BACK[1]
Message: Use simply 'return'.
Suggestion: return
... textbooks and class notes. When adults return back to home from school, they tend to play ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, really, regarding, second, so, well, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, such as, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2473.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 487.0 407.700716846 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07802874743 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75865334477 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 243.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498973305955 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 744.3 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.7608100099 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.409090909 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1363636364 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.54545454545 5.45110844103 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245007574149 0.236089414692 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0786243133932 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561519724898 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163782318676 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0392070931777 0.0645574589148 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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