TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and ex
There is no doubt that today people are inclined to find their favorite profession. This brings up a controversial question: If a person gains opportunity to have a secure job, should s/he disregard it and wait to find more desirable job or hold it? In my perspective, I think that holding and engaging in a secure job is better. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate on my point of view.
To begin with, the first reason that immediately comes to mind that economic situation is currently bad. In fact, there are scores of people who are unemployed and do not have any career. Besides, a lot of companies and firms intend to fire their employees because of economic depression. Company holders do not want to recruit new people, as they have economic problems such as lacking money for paying salary of new employees. All of these issues related to economic create a condition that force people do not quit from their profession. However, if they observe an opportunity such as low-paid job, they attempt to use it, as by having a secure job, one could gain monthly salary. Therefore, waiting for a satisfying career is not sensible because of economic problems.
The second reason that support my standpoint is that people can get several benefits from a secure job. These worker can earn monthly reasonable salaries or they can gain medical and insurance benefits that other jobs do not provide. Not only that, but also employees have a permanent job in the office or in the company, while other people in others jobs have temporary career, which they are always in the danger of losing their job. Moreover, people by working at a secure and permanent job are able to pay their important expenses such as transportation bills, accommodation expenses and so forth, while if they choose to not work that will have problems in supplying life requirement. So, as you can see, there are some benefits by choosing a secure job.
On the other hand, there are some justifications for pursuing satisfying jobs. One is a chance to be promoted in the job. In fact, nowadays, the company' managers value the workers who has good achievements in their career, so if the workers work hard, it is possible for them to take high-rank job in the future. The other factor is obtaining more salary. Individuals who work in the firms that are international and famous are well-paid, For instance, I heard that the worker’ income in the Google company are as high as twice of my country worker’s.
In conclusion, according to above-mentioned factors and weighting the pros and cons of taking a secure job, I contend that getting a secure profession is better that waiting to find a desirable job. The reasons behind this viewpoint are my countries' bad economic condition as well as providing some permanent benefits. Although there are some benefits surrounding to waiting to find more satisfying career, one should ponder about his preference to see whether s/he likes to be unemployed or not.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 190, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'disregards'.
Suggestion: disregards
...unity to have a secure job, should s/he disregard it and wait to find more desirable job ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, while, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in fact, no doubt, such as, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2490.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 510.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88235294118 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75217629947 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78877025286 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486274509804 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 792.9 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6738393583 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.75 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.25 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.16666666667 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300840571983 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0869257287013 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0580655403056 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170506660131 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0435618875823 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.02 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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