Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, due to the advanced breakthrough of technology, paople have access to different type of siocial media in which they can communicate with others and share their experiences. Some people prefer to share their own experiences on social-networking site and record them. However, some others may have an opposite viewpoint. When it comes to me, it is my firm conviction that recording my experiences on social media has some benefits for me, so I prefer to do that. To support this, there are several reasons two of which are going to be aptly explored in the following.
First and foremost, the most prominent reason which comes to my mind is that, social sites are places where people from all around the world and with different thinking caps use that. Some people use these media for their work and some others cosider that as an entertainment for their leisure time. As a result, in can provide people with a large community to socilize with eachother and share their experiences. For example, I am a photography student at university, a couple of years ago, I was supposed to take some pictures of nature for my final project. Before I finished my project, I have uploaded my photos on my website which was public for all. A famous photographer commmented some constructive notes on my pictures which helped me to improve my project, as a result, I gained the top mark in class.
Furthermore, another noteworthy reason that should be taken into account is that, these sites can be a secure information storage. There are a lot of unexpected event which may happen, and they are vulnerable to lose some of their ducuments. Only with saving and recording their experiences and results on social sites, it is posiible for them to have access to them where and whenevere they want. Take my personal experience, as a compelling example, last year, when I was conducting research on my master thesis, I recored all my documents and lab results on my academic website. One day, my lap top's LCD burnt, so I do not have access to my documets saved on that, but thanks to social site I was able to restore all my achievements during my research. Had I not recorded on my academic website, I would not been able to finish my thesis and graduate on time.
In short, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that using social-networking sites can be beneficial for all people. The fact that they can share they experience and also use others, coupled with its advantage as a secure stirage for information and documents, is the reason which strengthens my claim.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... day, my lap tops LCD burnt, so I do not have access to my documets saved on that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, then, for example, in short, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2134.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78475336323 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84213675923 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493273542601 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 691.2 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6094155577 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.315789474 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4736842105 20.6045352989 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.89473684211 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243844347315 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0959810134791 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931657096041 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177811331389 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0896257683194 0.0645574589148 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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