Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
With the rapid advance of technology and economy, social networking has been increasingly attached importance to by modern dwellers, playing an indispensable part in daily life, including exposure to information, interaction with intimate friends or colleagues and even the accomplishment of business agendas. While some get more accustomed to uploading pictures or other private information online, others regard this as a threat to disturb their life. From my perspective, the merits of this approach outweigh its counterpart.
Initially, social networking is easier to record one’s daily life, which is beneficial to fulfilling individual life. For one thing, owing to boosted development in corresponding service, mobile phones bear the potential to keep traces of life to the utmost. For instance, when taking a visit to Los Angeles for Christmas, tourists are allowed to take photos of such spectacular scenes in Santa Monic Beach or even shoot a video clip about fantastic tours in Universal Studio. With a single click operation, these sources would be uploaded into cloud where information is safely stored. For another, friends and family members are supposed to enjoy the same experiences by browsing one’s online records, thus strengthening interpersonal relationships. Under this circumstance, keeping records online serves as a medium to store and share personal experiences.
Additionally, keeping records online is conducive to spreading useful information as a whole. Specifically, it’s quite convenient for individuals especially teachers or company managers to upload a series of documents in online disks where students or staff are inclined to download essential materials. Accordingly to a survey conducted by Sina Weibo, after polling hundreds of teachers in the Beijing from different schools, a significant percentage of respondents claim that their students are likely to download relevant materials whenever they are if class notes, test samples and even specific experiments in the disk related to their Facebook account are stored, which spurs students to copy educational materials soon.
Admittedly, keeping records like identification number online, it would give others access to fetch such private information, giving rise to potential identify theft. Nevertheless, as long as people are prone to enhance the awareness of confidentiality, the issue will be addressed. Without sharing sensitive information, online posts render one’s life more fun by making comments under each status post, which bonds friends together. In conclusion, it’s favorable to share information online, considering the contributions to more convenience and the delivery of useful information to benefit others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 305, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Accordingly,
...clined to download essential materials. Accordingly to a survey conducted by Sina Weibo, af...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, if, nevertheless, so, then, thus, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, for one thing
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 43.0788530466 32% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2338.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.81592039801 4.8611393121 120% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12492865194 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 258.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.641791044776 0.524837075471 122% => OK
syllable_count: 738.9 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.5591900382 48.9658058833 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.125 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.125 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6875 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224853866984 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0661592791181 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555740223157 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122534791945 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0189048316396 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 11.7677419355 157% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.18 58.1214874552 50% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.77 10.9000537634 154% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.77 8.01818996416 134% => OK
difficult_words: 150.0 86.8835125448 173% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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