Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records Which approach do you prefer, and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
This question presents an indivisual preference of Internet use. Some people enjoy sharing their lives and leaving records online while some do not. As far as I am concerned, my own experience and personality have led me to conclude that not to upload my life online makes me more comfortable.
To begin with, I thought uploading the pitctures and information to the social media, such as Facebook, wastes a lot of time. Before uplouding, I need to write some content, select pictures and maube find some hashtag. Take my friends, Mike, for example, he always need to take a picture and upload on his social media before eating. Many times, all the firends have done their dishes and he still thinks what to type to describe the picture.
In addition, I will be worried about other's opinion if I upload it online. Since it will leave the record that may last forever, I am afraid of saying something rude or improper or accidently insulting others. I have a grieved experience. When I was in high school, I did not know a friend failed on exam and post the good grade I got. Then, he was very upset about this that time.
Finally and perhaps the most importantly, I truly can not enjoy sharing my life and uploading it to the cloud. I preserve the behavie that put nealy all their lives online as showing off. For instance, many pepole only choose to upload the picture that they eat in a fancy resturant, and make an illusion that they have a wonderful life. I am quite bored and tired of doing so.
Given the reasons above, I firmly will prefer not to create such records on socail media. I realize that numerous people is obsessed with it and I respect this behavior. However, I believe it is not the life that I purchased.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...was very upset about this that time. Finally and perhaps the most importantly, I tru...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, may, so, still, then, while, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, i am afraid, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1429.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 312.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58012820513 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44938699076 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589743589744 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.9427577448 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.2105263158 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4210526316 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63157894737 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237797721017 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589309746138 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059202970247 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121395583739 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587454978666 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...was very upset about this that time. Finally and perhaps the most importantly, I tru...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, may, so, still, then, while, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, i am afraid, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1429.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 312.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58012820513 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44938699076 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.589743589744 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.9427577448 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.2105263158 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4210526316 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63157894737 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237797721017 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0589309746138 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059202970247 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121395583739 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0587454978666 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.4 11.7677419355 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.