Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records.Which approach do you prefer, and why?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's modern life, thanks to technological breakthroughs and cutting-edge innovations in every section of science, people’s concerns have altered dramatically. In this line of thought, some people are of the opinion that there will be no problem if they upload their personal data in social media. In contrast, I subscribe to the view that people should not allow others to reach their personal information. I feel this for two main reasons; in the following paragraphs, my ideas will be elaborated on this issue in more detail.
To begin with, it is no secret to the point that if individuals let others access their data, they might have been threatened by them. generally speaking, the internet is not a safe place, since people became vulnarable with opening an option for theafs or hackers to atack them. To put it in other words, the more people upload their personal data in socil media, the less prootection they will make. my personal experience is a compelling example of this. some years ago, my personal banck information was hacked by peoples and I found it affter a week and it was too late to take them. In fact, I uploaded my pictures and phone numbers and many data in my computer in an application and one day some one sent me a massage; I was not read it because I have recived a variety of massage per day and unfortunatlly confirmed the specific massage and let them to access my persoanl information.
Another reason is that with uploading pictures in social media, people may hurt others undirectly. To be more specific, youths are interested in
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others they have a wonderful life. A wide range of people cannot afford these luxtury lifes, such as having expensive cares, going out every nights to different places, and having unusuall life style. As a matter of fact, it causes, nowadays, menthal and physical problems and people encounter difficulties in their life. For instance, parents who cannot buy those luxtiry dinner for their children might get deppretion and other mental illnesses.
Drawing upon the reason that I mentioned above, although there are several exceptions exculded from general rules, I believe that people should not upload their private life in social-networking sites. Not only do they increase the risks of being abused in their life, but also it might provide suffers for other residents.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, so, as to, for instance, i feel, in contrast, in fact, such as, as a matter of fact, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2037.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94417475728 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67517903217 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56067961165 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3251055103 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.166666667 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8888888889 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.44444444444 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241723296244 0.236089414692 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859191020182 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521828926156 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139360475138 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0268786294049 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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