Some people prefer to focus on ambitious dreams while others think realistic
goals are more important. Which do you prefer and why?
Humans are alive based on their dreams, I mean that we hope to achieve our goals and objectives which are in our mind at first step. Our dreams are impetuses to propel us in our life trajectory. While some folks like their ambitious dreams and follow them as much as it is possible, others focus on some realistec aims. In my opinion having a applicable dream and depict some actual goals is applicable. In the followiong essay, I try to delve into this in more details.
First, our resources and abilities are limited and we should diagram our life-plan based on our capability. Having a achivable goal which motivate us to endeavor toward that not only encorage us to do our best in our daily work but also help us to know our potentials and assets as how they are. This actual assesment is necessary to plan a detail, achievable, and practical schedule. We could split our final goal to several smaller objectives and try to acquir them in row. This approach help us to stay motivated whenever we hit the first goal in this path; and keep going up to reach the next one. For example, when I worked as a researcher in a pharmaceiutical company, the planning manager was so careful about the defination of our goals in our projects. He did not accept all fictional and ambitious goals even they seemed very profitable. In our company's policy they mentioned that big and ambitious dream is good only for stimulate our thinking and real goals are the best purpose for achiving success. It said that achieveable goals both motivate us to move toward next step and they are rewarding when we reach there. Then we should not plan a fantastic goal which is only beautiful but not actual and applicable.
Additionally, most of the ambitious dreams fail. Folower of those ambitious dream generally give up to follow their idea after first or second failure. This appproach waste our time and enegy. Those people frustrate when do not succeed and surrender to the environment. They waste all resources such as money and human resources like time. It is so hard to retrive and revive a defreated person to follow their dreams again and agian. Therefore, it is much better that we avoid those ambitious dreams. Only a vey small fraction on one percent of ambitious dream comes to true, and they happen just after a lot of hardwork, luck, and experiences. These circumestances do not gather in most of the times. To put it into perspective, in the pharmacy research world whcih is my major, statistic shows that only one drug molecule from one million molecule could act as a successful medication which comes to market and stay in shelf. This is a huge lesson for me that we should not follow any unaccessible dream, otherwise we will defeat strongly.
In sum, I strongly believe that we should follow our actual dreams. They are practical and achievable. Following ambitious dream waste our time, money, and energy, also we would frustrate after some failours and give up.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then, therefore, while, for example, i mean, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 43.0788530466 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2452.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 517.0 407.700716846 127% => OK
Chars per words: 4.74274661509 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.76839952204 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58942405437 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 257.0 212.727598566 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497098646035 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 771.3 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.7230501333 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.5517241379 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.8275862069 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.48275862069 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 11.8709677419 194% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17042875899 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0512844311529 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0485663210694 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119063483461 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0551572016131 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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