Some people say that the Internet provides with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to so much information creates problems. Which do you agree with?
The Internet has changed modern society. A few decades ago, people used to go to the library, or buy expensive encyclopedias to have access to information. Nowadays, however, the information is widespread because of the Internet. While some deem it as a valuable platform, others think the Internet has caused several problems. From my point of view, the Internet has helped to access relevant information that otherwise would be impossible to find.
First of all, many students use the Internet as their primary information resource. Although books and magazines have organized and detailed information about any topic, they are not easy to get. They are expensive, especially in my country, Chile, where only rich people can afford to buy a decent amount of them. The rest of the population has to ask for books in libraries, ask someone to lend them, or photocopy them. The Internet, on the other hand, is much more accessible. A vast quantity of population prefers to use the World Wide Web to access the information they need due to the low price of the Internet accounts, and its quickness. For instance, when I was majoring in geology in the university, I often had to look for information about rocks and minerals. I used to go to the library and ask for some books. However, on the Internet, I easily and quickly found the information I was looking for. This happened to me several times.
Second, the information on the web itself is not the main issue; it depends on how people use it. Many people use the Internet for socializing more than for looking for information. My mom, for instance, only uses Facebook and her email to keep in touch with her friends and classmates from a Bible course. She barely surfs on the Internet, and when she does, it is to find some locations or to know more about her Catholic faith. So, that does not create any problems for her. In the same way, passive information does not make any problem for the majority of the world.
To sum up, the Internet is more a benefit since it is accessible and its information is not detrimental as it depends on how the user manages it.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... it depends on how the user manages it.
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, look, second, so, while, as to, for instance, first of all, to sum up, in the same way, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1757.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72311827957 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69418011393 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.513440860215 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 567.9 618.680645161 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.8731530252 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.8636363636 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9090909091 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226223971849 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0685428867347 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495001629118 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142987915438 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0634576273745 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.8 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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