Some people say that the Internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The world in the 21st century is marked by the advancement of technology. The Internet is one of the flourishing branches of technology that has affected our life to a great extent. While some people are of the opinion that using the Internet has detrimental impacts on our lives, a multitude of people hold the view that it is the primary reason for humankind's improvement. According to my point of view, a majority of our diurnal activities are involved in the Internet. I have some reasons for my conviction, two of which will be explicated hereunder.
First of all, there is a whole host of sources on the Internet that can act as a facilitator for our diurnal responsibilities. The Internet offers a situation that the users can easily access multitudinous sources through a simple search on the search engines. It goes without saying that the information is assessed by other people and by evaluating their comments, one can draw a rational conclusion. For example, when I was surfing the web for one of my university's projects, I was confused with a lot of information I obtained from the Internet. There was a scientific website where other researchers share their comments on the information there. I spend a brief time on their opinion about the information and after that, I could easily come to a conclusion. So, I believe that if one is able to verify the information by reading other's comment, he can acquire an authentic knowledge.
Second, I take the view that one of the advantages of the Internet is that it is always up-to-date. one can safely assume that this updated information is beneficial for their users because it conveys the recent works of scientists. One of the objections of traditional sources of information was that they did not provide the readers with updated information. For example, the new versions of some books have not yet been published and they may include some obsolete facts and details that misguide the readers. On the other hand, by using the Internet, the researchers access numerable sources at different times. I remember that when I was presenting an information that I acquired from the Internet, my teacher was increasingly surprised by my facts because he was totally unaware of that data.
In a nutshell, I believe that The Internet provides an opportunity for obtaining the updated information that is evaluated by many people. Therefore, I believe that this information proves to be trustworthy for all humans.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: One
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, while, as to, for example, first of all, on the other hand, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 23.0 11.0286738351 209% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2066.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96634615385 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99683943474 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480769230769 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 666.0 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.5980391529 48.9658058833 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.3 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215709255941 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0660406372929 0.076458572812 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490425452797 0.0737576698707 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.130398413642 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0373000934314 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.58 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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