some people say that the internet provides people with a lot of valuable information. Others think access to much information creates problems. Which view do you agree with? use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Needless to say, one of the most important things in the modern time, because of its impact on all aspects of individuals' social and personal lives, is the internet. Therefore, in the modern time all people have always been using the internet for different things especially getting information about different things in their life. In this regard, some people believe that access to much information creates a lot of problems. In contrast, I think that the internet has provided very useful information for people. I will discuss my reasons in the following paragraphs.
Some people believe that if people access to a lot of information, expertise's income will reduce. Such people wrongly believe that expertise usually earn money, because of their knowledge which they can use to do somethings for other people and if people have this information they will not pay to expertise; consequently, individuals will not spend much time to learn new knowledge, in fact this phenomenon will damage future of development of sciences. Hence, they have posed that governments have to reduce the access of people to information that they gain from the internet. I disagree with this view, because having knowledge is not enough to do somethings in society, in fact people have to know how they should use this knowledge that this information is not available in the internet and jus expertise know them. You can take my cousin as the best example for this case. He is metal engineer and he always provide new information about his job on their personal website and his income has increased since he shares his information with other people. Thus, the information which is available in the internet cannot reduce expertise's income.
Access to a lot of information on the internet will improve individuals' life quality. This topic has been discussed by several sociologists that the majority of them believe that more available information helps people to perceive their lives; consequently, they can improve all aspects of their lives in order to have more qualify lives. Hence, these sociologists believe that governments have to increase the available information for people in the internet. I agree with this opinion, because every individual has specific life conditions and the only way which help them to improve their lives in the best way is that they have to increase their knowledge in all aspects of their lives and this is possible just by gaining different information from the internet. By way of illustration, I can refer to some statistics which have been published by several international organizations. Based on these statistics the life quality usually is higher in countries which a lot of information is available in the internet. Thus, access to many information via the internet, helps people to have better lives.
In brief, as I discussed in the previous paragraphs, some people believe that a lot of information that is available in the internet creates many problems. On the contrary, I argued that this view is not correct for a couple of reasons. First, access to many information does not have negative impact on individuals' income, second available more information helps people to improve their lives in the best way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 916, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'provides'.
Suggestion: provides
...ase. He is metal engineer and he always provide new information about his job on their ...
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Line 9, column 1037, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...ilable in the internet. Thus, access to many information via the internet, helps peo...
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Line 9, column 1037, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much information', 'a good deal of information'.
Suggestion: much information; a good deal of information
...ilable in the internet. Thus, access to many information via the internet, helps people to have ...
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Line 13, column 255, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...r a couple of reasons. First, access to many information does not have negative impa...
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Line 13, column 255, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun information seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much information', 'a good deal of information'.
Suggestion: much information; a good deal of information
...r a couple of reasons. First, access to many information does not have negative impact on indivi...
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Line 13, column 305, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
...mation does not have negative impact on individuals income, second available more informati...
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Line 13, column 412, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...to improve their lives in the best way.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, hence, if, second, so, therefore, thus, i think, in brief, in contrast, in fact, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2727.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 531.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13559322034 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81243596116 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.372881355932 0.524837075471 71% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 869.4 618.680645161 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.2230467402 48.9658058833 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.954545455 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1363636364 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31818181818 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.331391298787 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120050082718 0.076458572812 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714645567295 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224309261085 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379285259599 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 11.7677419355 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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