Some people say that teachers and parents should decide what assignment or activities children should do after school. Other says that children should make these decisions on their own. Which do you agree with and why?
There is no doubt that breeding successful children is highly important because children’s prosperity provides social benefits for all members of the community. In other words, growing children who are wise and responsible can provide massive advantages for the world. To this aim, both schools and families are responsible to teach valuable knowledge and skills to the teenagers. However, a controversial question here is that whether teachers and parents should decide about the type of the activities that students are doing after school or not. Personally, although some people believe that parents have more worthwhile wisdom and should decide for teenagers, it is my firm conviction that they should let juveniles follow their favorite activities after school. To support my idea, there are numerous considerable causes, two of which are going to be aptly discussed in the following.
First and foremost, not only is making feeling of freedom vital for children, but also is the right of all humans with various ages. Actually, if a mother or/and a teacher do not let a child to opt the type of the activity that is interesting to him/her, he/she will feel lack of freedom that is highly dangerous for his/her mental health. From psychological perspective, humans like to have the right of being able to decide about their life by themselves; therefore, choosing the type of activity after school by parents and lectures is neither effective nor fair. For example, when I was a child, I did not understand why I must go to school. Each morning at 7am that my mother used to waking me up, during that time I was feeling gloomy and promising to myself that after school I would watch my favorite TV series, Dr. Docky, in order to persuade myself to endure during the time of school. My classmates had experienced similar story like me, and I had not seen anybody who likes their parents and teacher decide for them. It is also not to be underestimated that parents love their children; therefore, they want to see their teenagers’ success; nevertheless, it is not a good way to enhance the chance of a child’s prosperity because this unfriendly approach may affect their performance even on their school’s tasks.
Another worthy factor that should be considered is that despite the public’s opinion, children are able to decide wisely because nowadays they access to massive information. A common opinion in societies is that because teenagers do not have enough applicable knowledge about difficulties on the future, they can not opt as effective as adults. Nevertheless, from my perspective, That could not be true all the times it is not true all the time. There are numerous children who can comprehend sophisticated problems even more accurate than their parent. Actually, they are children of technology and information, also the internet paves the way for them to reach to different shared stories and real-world experiences on the websites that teach us to find our talent and sharpening our skill sets. Additionally, the after school time is a suitable and precious opportunity for teenagers to follow their dreams and actions which can make them happy, and it is a fact that the more a child be satisfied, the more accomplishment the child will achieve. Briefly, today’s children are not like the past, they are more clever; so, they can handle their free time to find their happiness effectively.
To sum up, although bringing moral and professional children up is the duty of educational systems and families; hence, it is suggested that adults should have a plan for students’ after school time, I believe that this method affects teenagers’ abilities because the strategy destroys the children’s freedom. Moreover, nowadays’ children are significantly intelligent and pay adequate attention to their interests and goals. Also, a human lives to be happy, and enjoys from his/her moments; so, it is the children’s right to be cheerful and free.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 69, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'publics'' or 'public's'?
Suggestion: publics'; public's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, briefly, but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, while, for example, no doubt, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 40.0 15.1003584229 265% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 13.8261648746 181% => OK
Relative clauses : 25.0 11.0286738351 227% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3225.0 1977.66487455 163% => OK
No of words: 652.0 407.700716846 160% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9463190184 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05314661074 4.48103885553 113% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69355678008 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 299.0 212.727598566 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.458588957055 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1018.8 618.680645161 165% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 20.6003584229 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 652.0 20.1344086022 3238% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 48.9658058833 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 3225.0 100.406767564 3212% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 652.0 20.6045352989 3164% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 156.0 5.45110844103 2862% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8709677419 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.280711253392 0.236089414692 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.280711253392 0.076458572812 367% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191734077399 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0655793982151 0.0645574589148 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 327.9 11.7677419355 2786% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -590.3 58.1214874552 -1016% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.10430107527 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 257.6 10.1575268817 2536% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.91 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 39.34 8.01818996416 491% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 139.0 86.8835125448 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 59.0 10.002688172 590% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 262.8 10.0537634409 2614% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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