Some people think that the family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence on young adults. Which view do you agree with?

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Some people think that the family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence on young adults. Which view do you agree with?

Upon the above question, different people have different opinions based on their emotion, education, culture, etc. From my point of view, both family members and friends are important influences on young adults. But I think friends play a more significant role and in the following paragraphs, I will try to explain my position more clearly.
First and foremost, young adults spend most of their time studying in schools. They go to school from early in the morning to late in the afternoon. So that they usually get in touch with their classmates for long hours. Besides, most young adults prefer to study in groups or do research projects and assignments with their friends. They can talk to each other, exchange information and share ideas easily and in a more convenient way. In contrast, many young adults cannot share their secrets easily with their parents because there is a gap between two generations.
In the second place, some young adults have part-time jobs or participate in sport activities. In these conditions, their teammates or colleagues are important influences on them. They have to cooperate with their friends effectively in order to achieve their goals. Sometimes, they need money and they prefer to borrow it from their friends instead of asking parents for money.
Finally, it is important to bear in mind that parents and siblings are countless influences on children. In my opinion, parents are our first teachers. They teach us basic skills like talking, walking, eating and so forth. Mothers teach daughters how to prepare foods or wash dishes and fathers teach sons how to drive properly and behave toward others respectfully.
Taking all the aforementioned arguments into account, it can be concluded that although parents are some influences on young adults, friends play a more important role based on the reasons which I outlined above.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 96, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, if, second, so, i think, in contrast, in my opinion, in the second place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1574.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 306.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14379084967 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63598911885 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581699346405 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.8482742323 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.4444444444 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289770308918 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0821791349783 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0894147953226 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154235604171 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.07093395143 0.0645574589148 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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