Some people think that the family is the most important influence on young adults. Other people think that friends are the most important influence on young adults. Which view do you agree with? Use examples to support your position.
Parents are the closest persons in the world for their child. They are the true friend and considered as the first teacher for the child. Some people may think that young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible is the better option for young adults. In my point of view, I believe that young adults who prefer to live with their families for a longer time is better option.
First, the younger adults who live with their parents get support from family in every aspect of life. Parents are the closest person to human-being and never want their children to be hurted. Let's take an exampleof famous netflix teen series 13 Reasons Why in which girl has commited sucide and her school-friends and class-mates were very disturbed. In this series, the director has beautifully described that association of young adults with there parents. Parents help them to get rid of depression and social-anxietycause due to that incident. Parents helps in improvementy of mental-health as they know beetyer their child as compare to others.
Second, let's take an example of survey carried out with Alumni association of Havard business school who gets job. After three years a survey has been done on a batch in which the alumnis were segragated in two classes who still lives with there parents and those who do not lie with there parents. It has been found that the people who live with there parents are less depressed and suffering from other illness. Thus, based on this survey it can be stated that yound adults who live there parents are more happy.l
Third, I want to take a example of my family in which I want tomake a comparison between my father and my uncle. My uncle who used to live outside due to his job-role is now habitual to live out of my home-town. On the other hand,my father who owns business shop always lives in same town with my grand-parents. Now after 20 years, my uncle does not bother about my grandparents who leaves his house as soon as he gets job. But,my father taking care of his parewnts because he lived with family for a longer time.
In conclusion, the above mentioned examples proved that yound adults prefer to live with their families for longer time are more happy as compared to young adults who want to live their parents as soon as possible.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, still, third, thus, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1914.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73762376238 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47070375032 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.485148514851 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 576.9 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7938432416 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.736842105 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2631578947 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47368421053 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138092967544 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0501304354297 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542942675416 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0867836204332 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0444067250148 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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