Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view?
In the contemporary world, with progressing technology in the various of fields namely farmland, housing, and industry, people demand more land for suppling these technologies. On the other hand, the increasing using land causes extinction many endangered animals. With this regard, a controversial question raised that is saving land for endangered animals is right idea or not? Some people have this viewpoint that is using land for an advanced technology. On the contrary, some people have opposite viewpoint that preserving land for endangered animals and natural environment. My opinion, I firmly subscribe second notion and will explain my reasons hereunder.
First and foremost, in today’s modern world, humans try using more land for getting more benefits and profits, with this approach, all of land and natural environment must be decimate that provides enough land for more construction. As a result, the next generations who will see the earth without any natural habitat will be deprived of any beauties from endangered animals. Conserving land for these animals is maintaining these animals, and then it can prepare a condition to other animals are allowed continuing their life in the natural cycle of endangered animals. Incidentally, the preserving endangered animals gives rise to save other animals, causing the other natural cycles of including them are saved.
Secondly, by substantially decreasing natural environment throughout the world, and heightening greenhouse gases, which are produced by improvement industries and cities, are enhancing the temperature of the world and incredibly changing the weather. Hence, conserving land for endangered animals not only preserves these animals but also rescues the earth from destroying thoroughly. Furthermore, natural environment has a consequential role that is generating sufficiently oxygen for breathing animals and humans. As the standpoint statistically from the weather forecast, with continuing this trend as for increasing the earth temperature in the near future, the earth will devastate perpetually for living humans and animals. As a result, humans who should change their approach to save environment for every alive creature will have the secure and pleasant world for the future generations.
All in all, conserving land for endangered animals not only provides a suitable condition for living, but also saves these animals for the next generations. Also, humans must know that all of the earth is not for them, and they must respect alive creatures’ rights. Finally, I think that will not conceive the world without any animals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, if, incidentally, second, secondly, so, then, as for, i think, as a result, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2233.0 1977.66487455 113% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.61055276382 4.8611393121 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97064520959 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489949748744 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 690.3 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.7792381768 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.055555556 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1111111111 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.72222222222 5.45110844103 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.350971618159 0.236089414692 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127187133635 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074682248298 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242849376916 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596407162481 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 11.7677419355 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.26 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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