Some people think that human needs for farmland, housing, and industry are more important than saving land for endangered animals. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, As the rapid growth of our world, Many things have been changing thorough the period including Industrial, Agricultural, housing sites. These sites are necessary for human and need being developed for their living as well. On the other hand, All of these practices seize the habitats of many animals which leads to extinction because of having nowhere to live. So, I totally disagree with the point that farmland housing and industry are significant for some reasons which I will explain in this essay below.
Firstly, the land for these sites is getting more and more consumed simultaneously, as the increase in population and industries in many countries. As a result, there are a few spaces for the animal to live and forage which bring about the unbalanced ecosystem and serious environmental issue like global warming. As everyone knows that animals also play a major role in the ecosystem. They are both consumer and producer. If there were no animals in the forest, It would be mere forest and have no diversity in the ecosystem. Moreover, it has not the only effect to surrounding and has direct effect to human which caused having not enough supplies for living like food, medicine etc. because human still relies on animals for various purposes as well. Therefore, It is necessary to leave some spaces for those animals to maintain the ecosystem.
Secondly, It has a long-term benefit for the next generation to do some researches or studying those endangered species. It would be better to decrease the rate of endangered animal and we can breed them more in the future for this purpose. In the present, We lose many endangered animals which some of them may not be well-explored and the next generation possibly have no chance to see them. Of course, It is primarily caused by human activities like the expansion of industries and some business. Therefore, If we don’t want to lose more animals, Everyone should save these animals by not interfering its own habitat and improve these site as if it is our responsibilities because it is world’s property.
To conclude, we should take into account of saving endangered animals than our needs of farmland, housing and industry for the reasons that it can destroy our ecosystem which leads to various problems and It is beneficial not only us but also the future which they can study and do a research about those animals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 44, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...adays, As the rapid growth of our world, Many things have been changing thorough ...
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Line 2, column 314, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nvironmental issue like global warming. As everyone knows that animals also play a...
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Line 4, column 283, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
... the future which they can study and do a research about those animals.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, well, of course, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2004.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 404.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9603960396 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71880448969 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.3607723568 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.333333333 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4444444444 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38888888889 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223929960037 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0764268614708 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.067400176613 0.0737576698707 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149803039621 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0183082956973 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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