Some people think that parents should plan their children's leisure time carefully. Other people believe children should decide for themselves how to spend their free time. Which idea do you agree with? Give reasons for your choice.

Every parent wants a good future for their children. Parents and teachers are meant to be educating them for it. Due to this fact, how to provide a good education to their children to increase their chance for succeeding in the own life becomes a crucial problem to every family. There are different issues about it. One of those issues is about leisure time: should parents plan their children’s leisure time carefully or let children make their own choices?

It is challenging to parents for planning their leisure time for keeping children productively occupied during this time. But it is a requisite duty. Without supervising them, most of children might make bad chooses like spending all day in front of computer, playing video games. It is easiest things to do and enjoyable to them. Therefore I am agree with the idea of parent must get involved to planning leisure time.For many reasons, people will show more passion and more diligent to do what they like, it is a common sense. Despite this fact, parent make children spend time on different activities on the purpose of leading to know themselves better. Otherwise their knowledge about their likes and dislikes would be limited. It is a key point to do it by influencing them not by forcing them.

In spite of my views, knowing that children will grow up, will be an adult one day. So we must regard this realty and let them increasingly make their own choices. That may help them become mature. But first we must develop and reinforce the sense of responsibility.

Votes
Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 177, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the children') or simply say ''most children''.
Suggestion: most of the children; most children
...quisite duty. Without supervising them, most of children might make bad chooses like spending al...
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Line 3, column 217, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to like'
Suggestion: to like
...most of children might make bad chooses like spending all day in front of computer, ...
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Line 3, column 285, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'is the easiest'.
Suggestion: is the easiest
...nt of computer, playing video games. It is easiest things to do and enjoyable to them. The...
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Line 3, column 332, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...est things to do and enjoyable to them. Therefore I am agree with the idea of parent must...
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Line 3, column 347, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'agreed'.
Suggestion: agreed
...o and enjoyable to them. Therefore I am agree with the idea of parent must get involv...
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Line 3, column 420, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...t get involved to planning leisure time.For many reasons, people will show more pas...
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Line 3, column 658, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Otherwise,
...e of leading to know themselves better. Otherwise their knowledge about their likes and d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, therefore, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1278.0 1977.66487455 65% => OK
No of words: 264.0 407.700716846 65% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84090909091 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57740588971 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594696969697 0.524837075471 113% => OK
syllable_count: 396.0 618.680645161 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.5372899131 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.1764705882 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5294117647 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.76470588235 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.371494223665 0.236089414692 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105762636137 0.076458572812 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110139112685 0.0737576698707 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.235532969391 0.150856017488 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.134746823792 0.0645574589148 209% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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