Some people think that we should keep away from others to improve our relationship, because being away from people reminds us of how important they are. Others think we should always stay with others to have good relationship because we can communicate with them more often. What do you think?
Human relationships can sometimes be complicated mainly because people cannot fully understand the basic requirements of a fine relation. Some people believe maintaining a good relationship require them to always keep in touch with people to enhance the relationships, while others hold the opposite opinion. Personally, I think it is more beneficial to stay with other people, especially the ones we care about most, in order to improve our relationship and communication.
First of all, the modern world has brought many changes and challenges to our lives and people need to maintain close friendships with other people. The main reason for this argument is that people need well-established social relationships in order to be able to overcome many issues and problems. A good friend or an expert colleague, for instance, can help people to learn new skills to better organize their lives. My own experience is a compelling example of this matter. When I was an undergraduate student, I had to live in the university dormitory which I shared a room with three other students who also were my classmates. As we continue our education, studying alone became difficult and my roommates and I formed a study group to share our knowledge about various courses which was absolutely helpful and informative. After graduation, we became intimate friends and we always try to help each other in times of need. For this reason, maintaining good and healthy relationships is the most valuable job for people.
In addition, another significant point to be mentioned is that humans are social creatures which means, throughout history they have been familiarized with the merit of collective activities which can have constructive results. Moreover as humans are entering a new era, they become busier than before mainly because they have to work harder, so they may not have enough time to spend with their friends and families. This may seem natural, however, people may regret the past and the things they could have done for their loved ones. So, it is undoubtedly necessary to talk to them and spend quality time with them. For instance, my best friend's mother passed away recently. He lived abroad for a while for his studies and barely talked to his mother during that period. After that unfortunate incident, he blamed himself for not talking to her or making her happy just by sending her a simple gift. This is a terrible situation which some people may face, and they just need to pick up the phone and speak with the ones they care about.
In conclusion, maintaining fine relationships with people is absolutely essential for people to thrive and succeed in life. While some people do not believe in having close relations with others, in my opinion, it is both advantageous and necessary for people to keep in touch with their friends and their beloved ones as they may not have enough time to spend with them later.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 229, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...es which can have constructive results. Moreover as humans are entering a new era, they ...
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Line 7, column 62, Rule ID: ABSOLUTELY_ESSENTIAL[1]
Message: Use simply 'essential'.
Suggestion: essential
...ining fine relationships with people is absolutely essential for people to thrive and succeed in lif...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, while, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2442.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 488.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00409836066 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76904548046 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524590163934 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 763.2 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.683259795 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.285714286 100.406767564 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2380952381 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47619047619 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306201232402 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0909112475947 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0699895982808 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213634381207 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0978714954346 0.0645574589148 152% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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