Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
With the advances in Information Technology, people have access to a wide variety of information resources such as the Internet and television channels. These tools provide people with the ability to acquire useful knowledge and they can also enjoy watching amusing contents. Some people may think advertisements are not appropriate for children of a certain age and that these contents should be banned. I believe advertisements can be both advantageous and enjoyable for children. This essay will discuss this matter.
First of all, the modern world has brought many unique challenges and changes and people need to be prepared to overcome those issues properly. In general, people need to learn and develop many useful skills to be capable of managing difficult situations in life. Children are no exception and they need to gain knowledge at young age. Although proper education is of great importance, children need to have their own free time to play or watch TV programs. Information resources usually have some dedicated space or timespan to advertisements and some of these contents are constructive for children. For example, by watching some ads about the dangers of leaving home alone, they may be warned and informed and they may avoid such decisions. Moreover, there are some advertisements that encourage people to maintain a healthy diet which are absolutely beneficial for children. They can learn to follow some basic patterns to have a healthy lifestyle.
In addition, another significant point to mention is that parents and teachers play a vital role in ensuring that children actually benefit from watching TV programs. Although many useful and informative programs are produced, however, there are some inappropriate contents that children should not see and as a result, children should be monitored. Parents must observer their behavior at home after watching TV and teachers are also responsible to show them how to develop suitable skills by spending time on TV. For example, instructors should teach children to organize their time and ask them to give feedbacks after spending time on some TV programs. By reviewing those feedbacks, teachers and parents can assist them better by shaping their mind toward what is best for them. Some children may show more interest in music when they watch a musical movie and some of them may be motivated to paint by an artist appearing on TV. For this reason, children can benefit from watching any TV content but they should be monitored by their parents and instructors.
In conclusion, children need to learn many concepts and skills in order to contribute to society in the future. Watching television programs can be beneficial as they can both learn and enjoy. As these young people are expected to become bright members of their communities, they should be allowed to watch those programs and parents and teachers can monitor them to ensure they learn and succeed.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in general, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 26.0 9.8082437276 265% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 27.0 13.8261648746 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2471.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19117647059 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74546557235 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46218487395 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 756.9 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0956908786 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.434782609 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6956521739 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.39130434783 5.45110844103 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138965404668 0.236089414692 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0515959961206 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390036238785 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0981881239481 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0210956751962 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 11.7677419355 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 118.0 86.8835125448 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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