Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Students are more influenced by their teachers than by their friends.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There have been many controversial debates about how people and in particular teenagers and students, are influenced by external factors. Among numerous parameters, teachers and the way they treat students in schools have been recognized as a significant impact. However, young people usually put more value on their intimate relationships with their friends and that is the reason why they are more affected by those friendships. This essay will discuss this matter.
First of all, sociologists classify different kinds of impacts on a society. People in general are more influenced by their friends and colleagues according to these scientists. Students and young persons are no exception as they spend most of their time with their close friends. They may see each other regularly to talk and play games. They also go shopping together and watch movies. All these shared activities give them a sense of happiness and safety as they trust each other and they enjoy passing time together. Moreover, in such group activities these young pupils learn from their friends, for example by forming a studying group. My own experience is a compelling example of this fact. My friends and I have been friends since college and we spend a lot of time on group activities such as traveling, camping and even online courses which help us develop many useful skills. For this reason, it is obvious that students are more affected by their classmates and friends.
In addition, another significant point to indicate is that with the advances in technology, people now have access to a wide variety of attractive devices and services such smartphones and social networking services. These facilities not only have helped them to enjoy the life better, but also people have several opportunities to improve their potential abilities through, for instance, informative online resources. Furthermore, using their smartphones people have become more close to each other as they can communicate via services such as Facebook, Instagram and Whatsapp. As a result, they the concept of global village is becoming a non-negligible fact and people can have great impact on each other. According to some research conducted at a prestigious university, teenagers are spending almost 30 percent of their time on social networks which means these services are playing the role of an influential medium. So it is not surprising that people are affected by others specially by their friends.
In conclusion, although teachers play an important role in shaping students' minds, these young adults are more likely to be influenced by other external factors. Among many factors intimate friendships, in my opinion, have been recognized as the most important parameter that can affect students and teenagers in particular.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in general, in particular, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2354.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3018018018 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79336306296 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52027027027 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 721.8 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.626942162 48.9658058833 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1818181818 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.81818181818 5.45110844103 162% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202932466537 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688322857196 0.076458572812 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0752446685465 0.0737576698707 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133152571353 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.046194710934 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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